Chapter 4: This has some really useful tips, thank you. (I'm actually a fan of your taoris fic checkmate too.) But for this chapter, I would like to point out that words like "in" "on" "at" etc. are actually prepositions, not adjectives. I don't really know how to explain it but this 1) (http://www.englishclub.com/grammar/grammar-glossary.htm) and 2) (http://www.writingcentre.uottawa.ca/hypergrammar/adjectve.html) might help. You can google the terms too!

Chapter 6: so i just read this now... i just wanted to scan and stuff. but i would just like to say i agree about MPreg.

i don't have anything against the idea since i've watched and read ___ Pistols but the author/mangaka have sort of made an alternative world that made it believable. but i haven't really read any fanfic (probably skim through something) and well... a natural Mpreg birth?! so i'm never going to find myself reading one. coz i'd be laughing and i'll be pointing out faults until the end of the fic.

Thank you so much for making this! :D It really helps with my writing!
I agree with chapter 7 wholeheartedly. Because, if anyone has been to the Hetalia fandom, they will know that some authors LOVE writing out the accents. And you get a face full of multiple accents from multiple countries. It ain't cute, it's irritating

Chapter 7: 110% agree on chapter 7 =_=
Every time I read a story with stuff like that^
... I feel like giving up the fic altogether. ;~; Thank you for pointing it out. I don't feel like the only one who hates it now =D

Chapter 7: chapter 7: THAT'S REALLY TRUE!
I don't like it when someone writes a story with the alien language. (Yes, I call it as an alien language)
~___~

This helps so much for writing^^ Thanks for spending your time to type these tips up for us =3 Really appreciate it!

I usuall have problems with using paragraphs- mainly where to start and where to end. But this made me understand a quite bit.

This was really helpful