Chapter 9: And isn't this high school? If Jimin was conceived 18 years ago, he's 17 and a sophomore is around 15-16 unless this is in Korean age? And what about his older sister? When was she conceived? I'd have assumed the honeymoon would have her as the result if she's the noona. Also slightly confused about the ending of this chapter. But excited to read the rest.
Obviously this is just my opinion and what I consider as constructive criticism! Because we all need that. Your ideas are good. And your writing just as much. So yeah. You don't have to take this in consideration. It's just my opinion after all. :) (2/2)

Chapter 9: Hello there! :)
Okay so first I like your ideas for this fiction. They are really good.
Second how can Jimin say Namjoon is ugly??;-; that guy is bae. Cuter than anything else in this whole world.
Well I've read your fiction after putting it up for so long because I'm a lazy bum although I really like Jinmin not as much as Nammin tho. We need more fics with those two tbh. But anyway. Not going to lie, I was really disappointed at how short the chapters were. I felt like you could have developed so much more. By trying to give them this feeling of "mystery" you left out so many more things that could have been developed into something else. This fic doesn't seem to be only from Jimin's perspective as we see his parents' too and even the teacher's. I felt like by talking even more in chapter 1 about how Jimin felt with the kiss that was especially in an open space would have been good. How he reacted after the warm feeling stopped. How he hurriedly or maybe even slowly walked out of there. Did he touch his lips unsure if that was really happening? Did he wiped out his lips just because he knew that was how he should react while inside he felt conflicted?
What about Jin? It's nice for him to be all mysterious but somethings about him would have been good too. Not like a pov from him but at least Jimin trying to analyze him by his expression. "Jimin saw the smirk on his face and wondered if he was proud of what he just did. Was it something he had planned?"
But the chapter that felt like it needed more update was chapter 2. I felt like it could have also be combined with chapter 3 because I thought 3 was another day. And also just to show how worried Jimin's mom was it could be something like "she had to take off from work(...)" idk haha.
And chapter 6 and 7 could have been combined too. With just something for example like "however on the other side of the country, everything wasn't so happy" idek but I hope you see what I mean?

MY GOD please update, so far I really ing love it, would love to see what happens next!!!!!

Chapter 9: So good! Can't wait for update!!!

Chapter 9: Jin u badass af I thought ur pink princess? lol. I hope u update soon, it's rlly good ^^

Chapter 9: I love badass Jin. Hahaha and gosh! I'm so curious what will happen next.

Chapter 9: is going down....

Chapter 9: OMG OMG!! Jimin, why would you do that?? >.> Jin is angry! He is freaking angry omfg!! Ahhhh!! >.< I'm so excited! I can't wait, for the next one!
Thank you for this update! I love you *3*

Chapter 8: Awww im happythis fic is continuing!

Chapter 7: Omg this fanfic is amazing!!!
I'm really enjoying it, can't wait for you to update more!!
keep up the amazing work!
I love how Jin is a badass and not a princess lol It's really refreshing