Chapter 2 - A lovely day ;

F.T. Island Dorm Life

-Minhwan's POV-

I played aronud with the gang and learn alot of things. Like, they call themselves "F.T. Island" for Five Treasure Island. I asked them, "But hyung, there was only four, why five?"

And then all of them quieten down, Jaejin hyung dropped a tear.

"Omo, hyung, mianhae.." I turn to Seunghyun-hyung "did I say something wrong?"

"Ani, it's ok. before we found you, there was another guy."

"Ne," Hongki-hyung said, "His name was Oh Wonbin."

Jonghun-hyung came in and continued, "Jaejinnie's lover. "

And then Jaejin-hyung let a stream of tears come out but he still wasn't making any sound, then Jonghun-hyung went over and hugged Jaejin.

"Omo, jeongmal mianhae Jaejin hyung... I didn't know.. I was just curious and.."

"Anida, It's ok Minari.. *sniff*" Jaejin hyung said. It somehow gave me a little hope. I went over and hugged him..

"It's ok, don't feel bad Ok, Minari?" Jaejin hyung then released the hug.

I still felt bad but since Jaejin hyung pouted when i din't smile, i forced a smile for him and he smiled !  CC: kekekekeke~

 

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Mianhae, exams = busy busy busy ! >.<" i'll update ASAP ok ? CC: ciaociaos~! ^.^

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choijonghyunsaranghe #1
Chapter 16: I cried T_T
DKimLittleGoddess #2
Uhhh... I don't get it. -.-; You're what seems to be 'plot' and the whole story is completely different. There's a lot to point out but I'm gonna comment what I remembered.

You're writing style is kinda... off. There was a lot of unnecessary smileys everywhere and too much use of 'kekekeke'. If your characters are happy, you can always express it in other ways like, 'He chuckled, "Blah Blah Blah." Then smiled.' instead of using that laugh too often.

And the story was too fast paced. The days were continuous and a lot happened like they did this and that and immediately saw Wonbin, etc. Wonbin's last five minutes was wayyy too fast. You didn't even wrote what happened during the analysis and just injected him with a 'killing medicine' whtver that's called. ~.~;

And as I've said, the plot and the whole story is different. It ended with Wonbin dying? I thought I'm reading about F.T Island's Dorm Life focused on SeungHwan. I was expecting that they do things like this and that with Minhwan but then it shifted and focused on Jaejin and Wonbin's story. -.-; And whatever happened to SeungHwan after they discovered they were childhood friends? -.-;

And how can Minhwan magically knew that Wonbin is sick? O.O; He inherited this from his mother... Okay. But he immediately knew it was stomach cancer? Whoa... *O* But this is a 'fic' anyways, so it's acceptable in a way.

Sorry if I sounded harsh. I'm not being mean or anything... ^^v You can improve, definitely! :)

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YourRemedy #3
Waeyo!? Why did you kill wonbin? Why? T-T<br />
anyways, I love it!<br />
paranoidfreaker #4
Oh my~~ Wonbin you're sick?????<br />
TT^TT
paranoidfreaker #5
new reader here!! wah~~ i think i love your story.. just update soon.. and i hope wonbin don't do anything that will hurt jaejin..<br />
^^
asdfghjBullySong #6
cliffhanger .. i hope wonbin will not do anything to our jaejin :))
SHINee2MinLove #7
@kihyunkit; haha! :D ne, thank you very very much!! :D
asdfghjBullySong #8
eheheh i love your pairings and the story :D so cool :D update soon :D
SHINee2MinLove #9
@kihyunkit; haha((: ne, i will update asap. :D gumawo for reading!!!^^<br />
@FT123456; hehe, thanks for reading too. ;}
FT123456 #10
Aww.. Jinnie gonna be sad ><
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