Suspicion

F.T. Island Dorm Life

After the late lunch, they left the place and headed back to the dorm.

"So.... We shall just go back and slack?"

"No, Hongki. We will go back and--"

"Play~~!" Seunghyun completed Jonghun's sentence for him.

"Keke, ne, that's a good idea." Hongki said it like a professor. And so they told jokes as they walked back to the dorm. Some were funny, while some were just plain boring.

"Ah~ Here we are! Just climb these stairs and we'll be home in--"

"Hongki! Lift's here!" Jonghun shouted to Hongki. Hongki made it to the lift just before the doors closed.

"Ehh? Fimiliar song ne?" Hongki said when he heard the elavator music. Everyone listened carefully and soon, everyone was happily singing to the song. When the lift arrived on their floor, they exited the lift happily. Their laughing came to a halt when they saw Wonbin waiting outside their dorm.

"What do you want, Wonbin? Haven't you cause enough hurt to our Jaejin already?"

"Hongki, please. Listen. I'm here because I want to apologize for leaving you guys like that. And I also want to spend some time with Jaejin again, like we used to..."

"Like we'll let you--"

"Ya! Hongki-ah! I think we should give him another chance ne?"

"Mwo?! But Jonghun-ah! He abandoned us all!"

"Ani.. I didn't mean to.. Mianhaeyo.."

"See Hongki, he's already apologizing. If Jaejin can forgive him, why can't you?"

"Fine." Hongki said and gave a venomous look to Wonbin.

"Gumawo, Jonghun-sshi.. Can I.. take Jaejin out?"

"Ne, sure. Just bring him back before 6, ok?"

"Arasso. Gumawo.. C'mon Jinnie~~" Wonbin held out his hand to Jaejin and Jaejin took it and followed Wonbin out.

"I have a bad feeling about that guy.."

"Hongki, stop being so suspicious, will you?"

"But Jonghun.. I suspect something. Something just isn't right about Wonbin...."

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Roar~~! Another cliff-hanger!! >:DDD Sorry this is such a short story.. I kinda rushed it a little cause it's kinda late here.. Omo, it's already midnight.. @.@ See you all soon, ok? I'll update soon~~! >< Mianhaeyo!

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choijonghyunsaranghe #1
Chapter 16: I cried T_T
DKimLittleGoddess
#2
Uhhh... I don't get it. -.-; You're what seems to be 'plot' and the whole story is completely different. There's a lot to point out but I'm gonna comment what I remembered.

You're writing style is kinda... off. There was a lot of unnecessary smileys everywhere and too much use of 'kekekeke'. If your characters are happy, you can always express it in other ways like, 'He chuckled, "Blah Blah Blah." Then smiled.' instead of using that laugh too often.

And the story was too fast paced. The days were continuous and a lot happened like they did this and that and immediately saw Wonbin, etc. Wonbin's last five minutes was wayyy too fast. You didn't even wrote what happened during the analysis and just injected him with a 'killing medicine' whtver that's called. ~.~;

And as I've said, the plot and the whole story is different. It ended with Wonbin dying? I thought I'm reading about F.T Island's Dorm Life focused on SeungHwan. I was expecting that they do things like this and that with Minhwan but then it shifted and focused on Jaejin and Wonbin's story. -.-; And whatever happened to SeungHwan after they discovered they were childhood friends? -.-;

And how can Minhwan magically knew that Wonbin is sick? O.O; He inherited this from his mother... Okay. But he immediately knew it was stomach cancer? Whoa... *O* But this is a 'fic' anyways, so it's acceptable in a way.

Sorry if I sounded harsh. I'm not being mean or anything... ^^v You can improve, definitely! :)

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YourRemedy #3
Waeyo!? Why did you kill wonbin? Why? T-T<br />
anyways, I love it!<br />
paranoidfreaker
#4
Oh my~~ Wonbin you're sick?????<br />
TT^TT
paranoidfreaker
#5
new reader here!! wah~~ i think i love your story.. just update soon.. and i hope wonbin don't do anything that will hurt jaejin..<br />
^^
asdfghjBullySong #6
cliffhanger .. i hope wonbin will not do anything to our jaejin :))
SHINee2MinLove #7
@kihyunkit; haha! :D ne, thank you very very much!! :D
asdfghjBullySong #8
eheheh i love your pairings and the story :D so cool :D update soon :D
SHINee2MinLove #9
@kihyunkit; haha((: ne, i will update asap. :D gumawo for reading!!!^^<br />
@FT123456; hehe, thanks for reading too. ;}
FT123456 #10
Aww.. Jinnie gonna be sad ><