Panic! At the Dorm Room
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Title: 7/10
It could have made a nice impression to everyone if, its written as this, Panic:At The Door Room. It kindda summarizes your story, with the words, 'Panic', 'Door Room' in it. Honestly, at first, I thought it was all about the only girl in the building, and so I was right.
Foreword: 8/10
It was nice, though it gives a little information of the story. Paragraph #9 : Her's typical teenage life isn't going to be typical anymore. It should be, Her typical teenage life isn't going to be typical anymore.
Plot: 11/15
The story is like the other fanfictions that were been popular here in AFF. Having the main protagonist live with 11 idiots for some reason and falls in love with them, with twists. Runaway Sister, The Only Girl in The Building, etc. There are also questions regarding your story. For one why did their parents just had a sudden decision to move into the same university Sehun was studying and have her move in their dorm? You should've emphasized a decent reason for the readers to not question themselves. Also in your chapters, don't put such a long title for each.
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