Dark Horse
★♛❝ CRYBABY Review Shop❞♛★Title - 10/10
It's simple yet very eye-catching. I don't have much to say but a nice job.
Foreword - 8/10
The foreward is readable and I can get the whole plotline easily just by reading the foreword and the outcome is equally just as obvious as well.
Plot - 7/15
This is really cheesy and I'm getting goosebumps from that fluff at the end, I meant it in a good way. However, I don't get why would a king throw a normal citizen into the dungeon just because he confessed to him. At most a king would do is to sent the citizen out of the palace with force. I think that if Kris is a wanted criminal and he confessed his love to the king, it would make not only more sense as to why Kris shoud be thrown in the dungeon but also drama and comedy. It can be made into a one-shot as well if you skip all those dramatic events and focus on the main topic.
Character Development - 12/20
Characters aren't that developed and I get that their past isn't that important for this one-shot. However, Kris' background isn't really known and I hope that you can describe a bit more on that as it is important to know how and where he learnt the skills he used during the duel with Chanyeol. And you might want to explain more on why Tao is grown to how he is now.
Poster and Background - 10/10
Your poster is beautifully designed and I especially love how it emphasises on the crown and the horse's silhouette. Overall, thi
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