Dream On!

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Title - 10/10
Although it's a really simple title, you made me stop and think of all the possibilities that could be of the dream and with the "fantasy" tag in it, I had try thinking of all the dreams which wouldn't happen in reality.

Foreword - 10/10
You gave me a quick but understandable pre-storyline and still able to make the readers curious about the insides of the story. I'm guessing that the helping hand is Baekhyun. Nothing much to say but a good job on the foreword.

Plot - 13/15
It started off fine, with a wallflower and a seemingly popular guy but then it rolled down a little to where typical anime shows flows towards - the girl showing her true self and a rich guy helping her along the way. The part that was interesting and unique is the power which the main female lead possesses - the power to see the future. It have a nice overview and since this is still an on-going story, I would like to see who that mysterious guy is, how she dealt with her crisis with/without Baekhyun and how they acheive their happy ending. Hopefully it's unique and have some surprising twists of events!

Character Development - 16/20
Chae Min seemed to be a really unique character whom is really expressive, judging by the sad/frustrated reaction in chapter 2. As the story goes by, I started to notice that she's not only a wallflower, but a scared wallflower. However I was quite confused as to how she have an inner devil inside of her when she dealt with the maids. As I get to know her, she is actually quite a smiley lass who is capable of doing anything decently well. I guess this is what they call a diamond beneath a dirty rock.
Baekhyun, on the other hand, was forced to like a passion which his parents wanted but it sort of explains how he had to have that pa

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KennyV #1
Chapter 1: ► story title LABYRINTH FOR LIARS
► story link http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/894779/labyrinth-for-liars-drama-romance-exo-sehun-baekhyun-kyungsoo-zitao
► genre MYSTERY, ROMANCE, DRAMA,
► # of chapters 1 BUT PLANNING TO UPDATE MORE SO YOU CAN REVIEW MORE
► reviewer ANY AVAILABLE
► password MUZIK
Rednovamber
#2
Chapter 2: ► Story title: Seasons of mixed emotions
► Story link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/813648/s---asons-of-mixed-em---tions-drama-romance-bts-psychologic-jungkook-taehyung
► genre: psychological, romance, drama, slice of life, slightly rated M.
► # of Chapters: 2 until now, but it is on-going.
► Reviewer: any available
► Password: Whatcha doin' today?

Take your time!~~
bts_kimtaehyung
#3
Chapter 1: ► story title: Blind Heir
► story link:https://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/750795/blind-heirs-angst-romance-tragedy-you-exo-baekhyun-kimwoobin
► genre: angst, romance
► # of chapters: 3
► reviewer: any available
► password:hot issue
gonexx #4
Chapter 1: ► story title : Eyes, nose, lips
► story link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/768207/
► genre : songfic, angst
► # of chapters : one
► reviewer : frozenlikeice
► password : Hot issue~
doubleabs
#5
Chapter 1: ► story title- The Game of the Maze
► story link- www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/741049/
► genre- action, romance, fantasy
► # of chapters- so far, 4
► reviewer- whoever wants to i guess~
► password- Volume up<333

Thanks!! :D
mysoulisstarving #6
Chapter 1: ► story title:Silver Aura
► story link:http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/696194/silver-aura-fantasy-leo-hyuk-vixx-ravi-ken-vixxandoc
► genre:Romance,Fantasy
► # of chapters:6
► reviewer:frozenlikeice
► password: Volume up

thank you~~
jeonwonussi
#7
Chapter 28: Oh, it's alright! I wasn't really in a rush. Thank you for sparing some time to review even if you're on vacation. :)
teehee. i'll try organizing my foreword again. i've been planning to do that for so long already but i'm just too lazy. lol
well, a shop did the poster for me and i liked how it turned out, to be honest. hehe. yeah, i have a lot of trouble with punctuations and such so i'll try working on it! i don't really use any font when i paste it on the body though. O.O but i'll check it out.

haha. i haven't really checked the stories with similar titles as mine but i'm glad that we have different plots.

Thank you so so much for the review! Good luck to you and the shop! :D
JESLEN #8
Chapter 27: oh my. thank you so much for this very insightful review. i cant believe i am really reading a review of my story. ill try to incorporate all of your suggestions, thanks a lot. well i actually thought of putting it on wattpad. maybe when ill be done with the story ^_^ haha thanks so much for the compliments. i am grinning like a fool and oh thanks for answering the poll too. lets see if you got it right on the next chapters. i really cant thank u enough dear. thanks for reviewing this again. and im sorry for my seemingly bashing attitude. im so embarassed. and if ur planning to read my other stories, i got to warn u that they are really cliche haha. ill credit you as soon as i get my PC dear. thanks and god bless! >_<
thebaroness
#9
Chapter 1: ► story title : Ludos
► story link : https://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/659609/ludos-highschool-exo-kai-kris-teenlove
► genre : romance, fluff , high school
► # of chapters : 40
► reviewer : frozenlikeice
► password : hot issue


Thank you so much n have a good day!
JESLEN #10
Chapter 23: The graphic artist uses symbolism whenever she makes a graphic, that is why I had chosen her. In my case, she incorporates lanterns to symbolize light and hope despite the darkness that the characters are experiencing.The two women have the same face in the poster but one could tell that they are different, which is one of the main points of the poster: to show the difference despite having the same face.

I cannot think of other titles that go along with the story without revealing too much. Do you have some suggestion?

What do you mean by your statement that the characterization is good but not the best? Are the characters static or dynamic? Do I need to characterize them more? I often use indirect characterization. Do you think the characterization need more work?

I know that arranged marriages are common in AFF but it's not actually the main point of the story.They are not even married. The arrange marriage is only one of the plots that I made. I know too that amnesia is common. But I incorporate it from the very beginning in order for the readers to relate to her: to know the mystery behind who she was as the story progresses. This way, the readers and Chae Won have the same pattern in discovering her identity.

And I actually have issues on my grammar. I usually incorporate different tenses on my paragraphs.

So, the story was not reviewed by frozenlikeice but rather cuteismysterious? And btw, the score should be 86 not 66. Thanks.