Chapter 8: Hey. So I love the fact that it's a BOF spin off. I like Destiny, I like girls who can fend for themselves. Now I don't think you need to have two parts for a chapter, they are already pretty short.There was a lot of grammar mistakes in the first chapter but I noticed you're getting a lot better. Make sure you read over and edit before you post. Also the POV are too quick, you should make them longer and more description is good. Thanks for reading my story and happy writing :)
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