Ver-Sah-Tyle Review

Trust The Little Bird [completed]
Author: ava_lava
Title: Trust
Link:http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/ava_lava2/
Reviewer:BangBangVIP
Site: VST http://ver-sah-tyle.blogspot.com

Title: 4/5
-I thought it went nicely with the story, just not with the poster. For me body language, even those in pictures can be read a certain way giving someone an idea of what will be going on. One word titles always catch my attention first, but I can't help thinking it may be too simple and easily forgettable.

Poster/Background: 7/10
-The poster is done nicely, and the background's nice too. The color choice gives off a neutral feel so it's kinda hard to tell what the feeling of the story is going to be and the fact that they are facing away from each other gave me a different idea of the story than what it actually was.

Forewords: 7 /10
- Very nice~ You credited the graphics designer, and included the essentials of a good forewords. The filler was interesting, it definitely caught my attention but that may also be because I think similarly to the way Jaejoong does in the story.

Plot: 11/15
- I think the plot is actually quite nice for someone into romantic, drama genres. Personally, I'm more of a horror, action, thriller girl but it's nice to read stories like this every now and again. The only thing is that I found it got boring after awhile. The fair bit of humor you mentioned in the forewords, I didn't quite find and there didn't seem to be any interesting twists besides Yunho being married, which all in all, I thought for Jaejoong but that was it.

Creativity/Originality:12 /15
- I quite enjoyed how the story was written. The details were nice. You have quite the vocabulary, and to me that was what I found so original and creative about it. Saying things in different ways can convey another meaning, even a deeper meaning.

Flow: 10/10
- It flows nicely, not to slow or too fast.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
-I didn't see any mistakes here. Your vocabulary is quite broad as well. See normally, this would be the section where I am most critical and pick apart the story to find any mistake, but I can't find one in yours.

Characterization: 8/10
-The relationship between characters and the way they developed was nicely done. I really enjoyed it. Your characters development throughout the story was quite appealing.

Writing Style: 10/10
-Everyone has their own writing style. Yours was understandable, as well as enjoyable. The flow of it was nice and at a steady pace.

Overall Enjoyment: 3/5
- I'm not a fan of boyXboy stories at all , nor am I a fan of DBSK but I do enjoy stories that are well written, that have a wide variety of vocabulary and details in which this story is a great example of that. The lake, or the ditch part of your story was interesting seeing on how you stated it was real. Those are the kind of things that make a story more interesting than others.

Sub-Total: 82/100

Extras:3 /5
-For requesting from ver-sah-tyle,excellent details and your broad vocabulary and for my lateness on the review. Sorry about that ^^

Total: 85/105

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Thank you, BangBangVIP, for the review!

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Artemis88 #1
Chapter 31: Beautiful story . Also quite inspiring and spreads hope and positivity . No matter what happens in your life , look around ,there's always another opportunity . Learn to accept failure or not doing your best as a normal part of life . Getting up ,acknowledging your situation , smiling in times of adversity , moving forward even when you're not sure where you're going is the secret of getting through life .

I also loved the little anecdotes you blended into your fic , like the one about the hermit crab . :)

Hats off !
CandyFreak #2
Chapter 31: Awesome! Amazing!
That's all I can say...@.@
jaexyong9597
#3
I read this story on winglin a few months ago, n this is one of my fave. I love all the metaphors you use here.
And I cried when I read some chapters. This isn't a tragic story but it makes my tears flow.
About the ending, I force myself to believe that Seulgi dies n Yunho comes to Jae because he realizes his feelings toward that ex-student of his. ^o^
mirokoi
#4
Oh, a thing I forgot to mention. I love the vibe words give out. It wasn't exactly modern and peppy, yet not quite that old and aged feeling. If I were to describe the vibe as an image, it would be in autumn, a large tree with rustic-coloured leaves, some fluttering in the breeze on the right. On the left, would be some white steps, where a couple is embracing, the smaller in the lao of the older.The ground is littered with leaves, but patches of green grass showing. That's what I see it (:
mirokoi
#5
Wow. This. Is truly a fascinating story. I read it from 8.30 until 11.30 (Now) and I really loved it. I especially loved the metaphors, the meaning, the life lessons in it. Beautifully written (Although I found a fistful of grammer mistakes. No harm though, still perfectly understandable) The ending was sweet, and I prefer to imagine Yunho still "happily" married, but still holding on to his love for Jaejoong, as Jaejoong had done. And Jaejoong would simply move on as a succesful doctor, always loving Yunho. Excuse my sappy mind.<br />
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Question though. You mentioned in your earlier chapters that Jaejoong's piano teacher was called Choi Siwon, and later Heechul's boyfriend was Choi Siwon. Were they the same person? (I freaking hope not O__o) It was insignificant but it attacked my brain like a mofo. :P<br />
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In any case, I love it. I'll reread it but now I have to shower as I am a wreck. Then get some sleep. Yeah.
ChiiryuJung
#6
Is it end yet??? no???<br />
How unusual story you have here ^^ And I couldnt believe you just 15? God..
ChiiryuJung
#7
So cute! how jae confess he in love with Professor JUng, LOL ^^<br />
How old Yunho is?<br />
I just read chp 9 tehee