The Fall Of The Tramped Roses

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Title:  2/5
Your title, just like I said to my other review is too, too long. Maybe something like 'Falling Roses' or 'Dead Roses' can suit it more. Your story was meant to be more of an angst story and before I actually clicked the story, I thought it was a romance story with a happy ending... so next time try to fit the theme with your title.
 
Poster: 3.5 /10
Err.... your poster isn't a proper one so I can't give you a higher mark...
 
 
 
 
Description & foreword:  4/10
You have no foreword, only description so I have to take of 5 marks.... your description was quite nice, so I give you a high score for it.
 
 
 
Plot originality:  25/30
Your plot is pretty same to some other angst stories but it did have some twists and bits... so I guess you plot is pretty nice. :)
 
 
 
Flow: 4/5
Your flow was good and it explained what happened and how it happened so I gave you a high mark for it. xD
 
 
Writing style: 10 /15
Your writing style was a bit boring... so I can't really give much marks for it. Next time try to add a bit more entertaining things too it to keep the readers continue. Apart from that, good job and well done.
 
 
 
Spelling/grammar:  4.5/5
Well done for this... no spelling and grammar mistakes.... Good Job! ^^
 
 
Ending:  6/10
To some people, they might get the ending really fast. To some other people, it might confuse us a little. I had to read it 2/3 times to get that she coughed out blood and died. So, next time try not make it too confusing for readers.
 
 
Bonus: 3/5
1. Good Job!
2. Good spelling and grammar!
3. I enjoyed it! ^^
 
Overall Enjoyment:  4/5
 

Total marks:  62/100

Good Job!! Thanks for requesting.

P.S. Don't foget to post and credit! ^^

Thank you very much for from requesting me.

If my review was no help then I'm very sorry. T_T

Keep improving and good luck with your other fics!

joanne200969

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flyingyen #1
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jwhong005 #2
i just applied for a review. i've been subscribed for a while and didn't realize i didn't submit a request. oops
chocolatenite #3
Thanks for your honest review.haha I didn't have time to check.
fizz-peaze #4
but may I ask, I still have no idea what's the difference of description and foreword. I just figured one is a description of the story and the other is just anything you want... i still get confused :(
fizz-peaze #5
can I point out something? My title is The Fall of the Trampled Rose" not "Tramped Roses" no, no, that wouldn't make much sense would it? lol...tramp rose. hahaha //can't get over that, tramped rose... LOL.. <br />
thanks for reviewing!
dawnrose #6
thanks~ LOL<br />
keep up the good work!
keymera #7
Username: keymera<br />
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Title of story: It Started with a Promise<br />
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Link to story: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/28059/it-started-with-a-promise-jonghyun-key-minho-onew-romance-taemin-you<;br />
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Characters & Story foreword/description: Main characters are Key and Mika the others are like supporties.<br />
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a story of a little girl who made a promise with her childhood friend.<br />
After 12 years she returned to her hometown, since she don't have any<br />
relatives in Korea, Minho (her best boy-friend) insisted that she should<br />
stay with him. To her surprise the guy whom she hated the most from the first<br />
time they met was one of Minho's mates and they're going to live in just one<br />
house. Will they stay quarrelling over things ? Will she find her childhood<br />
friend? Would she still remember the promise they made?<br />
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mika : Then let's make a promise :)<br />
boy : What kind of promise?<br />
mika : That we will marry each other, I promise that I will return and find you<br />
boy : Then I'll wait for your return<br />
mika : Let's make a pinky swear :)<br />
boy : It's a promise :)<br />
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Extras (What do you want me to do/ not to do): Nothing really. But I just want to say that I'm kinda lazy to edit my typo errors so I guess I'll edit it once I finished the story :)
summerswirlies #8
The reason why I used "Infinitely" is because the group is Infinite.<br />
It's a comedy meaning It's not to be taken seriously.<br />
The ending that I forgot to put is that Sungjong and Woohyun were watching the two of them... Well spying more like it.<br />
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Thanks!
summerswirlies #9
Username: borrriing123<br />
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Title of story: Drunk on Yogurt<br />
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Link to story:http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/39702/drunk-on-yogurt-oneshot-myungsoo-sungjong-woohyun-you<;br />
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Characters & Story foreword/description: Myungsoo/you... <br />
Cameo SungJong and Woohyun.<br />
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One look at Kim Myungsoo, you'll think that right away he's cool, handsome and charming. But only his group members and you, know that he's crazy, random, weird yet innocent at the same time. Why? Because he gets drunk on yogurt. How's that for being innocent?<br />
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Extras (What do you want me to do/ not to do): <br />
I don't have a poster yet. Sorry!<br />
and theres only one chappie because it's a oneshot :D<br />
I have several mistakes but I still hope you can enjoy :)
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