Sorry

Heart Strings
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CHAPTER 8: Sorry

 

Daniel pulled on the gas grip, making the motorbike he rode the fastest amongst the other vehicles on the streets of Seoul. That morning, there was something troubling his mind. He was still thinking aout the fresh chrysanthemums stored in front of his father’s ash compartment. Who put it there? He wanted to stop thinking about it, but still it kept coming to his mind. Therefore, he can only hope on the wind to take the thought away from his mind.

 

Daniel slowed the pace of the motorbike near Dongho’s place. He must return Tiger to the owner who is quite fussy if his favorite motor is blistered. But from a distance, Daniel was able to see the owner of Tiger spending his time chatting with a girl in front of his garage.

Daniel passed them and brought Tiger directly into the garage. After parking Tiger and opening his helmet, he walked over to the two persons.

"What are you doing here so early this morning, Giae?" Daniel asked the girl directly.

Not until the girl answered Daniel's question, Dongho had already represented her. "Of course looking for you, Niel."

Daniel frowned before replying, "If she's looking for me, she should go to a restaurant instead of here, Hyung .."

Daniel's reply made Dongho thinking for a moment, before he nodded and said, "Umm, you’re right.."

Dongho's innocent respond made Giae slightly smiling. The girl is one of the people who know Dongho quite well. For her, Dongho isn’t a tiger with a steep fangs as many people see, but bear with soft feathers that are funny enough to be her doll.

"Can’t I stop by here before having breakfast at the restaurant?" asked Giae while acting angry. "I should just go straight to college .."

Daniel came over and ruffled her hair slowly. "Don’t be mad, cutie pie.. Let's go to the restaurant and ask Jisung hyung to make breakfast." said Daniel to that long caramel brown haired girl, who then rewarded him with a nod.

"Come on hyung, you come too, this breakfast is free because I've been allowed to borrow your Tiger." Daniel said invited Dongho.

But Dongho shook his head. "I'll have to feed my fish first." Dongho replied while presenting his smile eyes.

Daniel and Giae laughed at it. The man in front of them does have a contradictory look and character.

 

Leaving Dongho's shop, Daniel is now walking with Giae to the restaurant. Her name is Song Giae, Daniel and Jaehwan's classmates in high school. Daniel is pretty close to Giae, until he can talk with her the things that normally cannot be talked about with others.

"Giae ya, did you visit your sister's ashes this morning?"

Giae was surprised by Daniel’s question. "I visited her last week. Why?”

Giae's answer made Daniel taking a deep breath. "I thought while visiting your sister ashes, you stopped by my dad's ashes." He paused, before adding, "There’s someone who put a chrysanthemum in front of my dad compartment."

"Hah? Could it be your brother??" Giae replied eagerly.

 

Yes. Giae is one of the few people who know Daniel's past. Daniel is the person who’s not easy to tell people about his past, but the girl accidentally found Daniel's father's ash compartment.

Giae, who was in high school, was often distracted by Jaehwan, who wanted to show her that little Jaehwan is more handsome than litte Daniel, making Giae memorized the childhood faces of Jaehwan and Daniel who were standing next to each other in the photo. The memory brought her to Daniel's past. She accidentally saw a photo of a little Daniel-like boy with a family, tucked in a compartment near her sister's ash compartment. She told Daniel about it, and Daniel responded by immediately asking Giae to take him to look at the compartment. And it turns out right, the boy is a little Daniel, and the owner of the ashes is his father. From there, Daniel began to tell his past to Giae.

 

"There's no way it's him." Daniel replied coldly.

"Hish, why not? Who knows, your brother is now back from America." Giae replied assuredly.

"Don’t give me false hope, Giae ya.. Why is he suddenly coming now? Remember, for fourteen years he has never come back." Replied Daniel pessimistic.

Giae heaved a sigh. "Well, if it’s not him then who? Your mom?"

"I told you, don’t call her my mom!" Rebuke Daniel with an angry look, before his face softened and said, "I don’t think it’s her.. I'm sure she didn’t want to use her precious time to visit dad."

"That means it's your hyu--". Giae haven’t finished responding to Daniel's sentence, when she heard the voice of a man which she very memorized.

"Ommo! Ommo! Ommo! There is an angel falling from heaven this morning!" Jaehwan greeted Giae with enthusiasm.

But the girl just rolled her eyes. She still wanted to talk seriously with Daniel, but the presence of this comedian friend was disrupting everything. Daniel took the opportunity to avoid a conversation about Seongwoo by going into the kitchen,

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Edit Seungwoo to Seongwoo after finding out that the proper spelling of his name is Seongwoo not Seungwoo ^^

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Love_ongniel #1
Chapter 14: HI AUTHOR-NIM..HEHE I CAN CALL YOU THAT RIGHT..I DIDN'T KNOW WHETHER YOU WILL CAME ACROSS MY COMMENTS OR NOT..BUT I WANT TO SAID, I LOVE THIS SO MUCH..I REALLY LOVE WHEN THE STORY INVOLVE ALL MEMBERS AND THANKS NOT MAKING ME CRY TILL END? I'M SCARE THAT YOU WILL MAKE ONE OF THEM DIE OR WHAT LIKE IN MV THAT I ALMOST THROW MY PHONE BECAUSE IM SO SCARE ? AND THANKS FOR THIS AMAZING PIECE ?
-escaping
#2
Chapter 14: i rarely comment on fanfics, let alone read on this website!! i just visited this site for a long time to read some random fics and this is very touching. great story! :>
hisnoona #3
Chapter 15: HUWOOOOOW NEW STORY
ChanBaekNunna #4
Chapter 14: Disini boleh gak yah komen pake bahasa Indonesia? Soalnya bahasa Inggris saya pas2an Thor...author orang Indonesia kan? Gapapa ya kalo saya pake bahasa Indonesia? Huftt...masih nyesek nie. Mau ngungkapin segala sesak didada(?) selama baca ff ini tapi bingung mau ketik apa? Hehe. Yg jelas makasih Author uda buat saya mewek n mata bengkak dihampir tiap chapter-nya. Bener2 jago deh bikin nyesek pembaca, dua jempol buat plot-nya. Kurangnya cuma di typo aja sih yg paling ketara, banyak kata yg seharusnya HE tapi diketik SHE ato sebaliknya SHE jadi HE, Brother jadi Sister (chapter 5). Sayang bgt jadi rada keganggu bacanya tapi overall KEREN ff-nya. Jujur saya ngarepnya jadi Romance OngNiel-nya ( #OngNielShipper hehe) tapi gapapa, bromance juga bagus ceritanya. Ahh saya kebanyakan ngoceh...sekali lg makasih Author uda sedikit 'bantu' saya mikir ttg hidup saya ;)
sarahban #5
Chapter 14: YEAYY FINALLY THEY MEET...IT THE BEST ENDING WHEN EVERYBODY DINNER TOGETHER AT THE ROOFTOP
FunnyKen #6
You actually made me Cry ..I cried like I found my own long lost brother..u r too good at making people cry ????..I loved this fic..I completed this in 3days.. anyways Happy New Year Author-nim
Eungi_
32 streak #7
Chapter 14: Ahh, I love the fluffy ending —although I expected a full blast angst based from the MV since I'm a pathetic masochist who will then bugs with "why" all the time but okay whatever forget it— I honestly thought the story would be longer. Daniel will wait for Seongwoo and the latter letting him go with his heart but this ending is good too. I was as shocked as Seongwoo when Daniel appeared in front of him.

I like Kuanlin's introduction here. He's the same as the 'sweet guy' in real life (and I love the joke Seongwoo made regarding his heart is as handsome as his face lmao) Although, the other characters —the Wanna One members I mean— are mentioned very brief and I would likely be bitter about it, I think it's fine since it's like that too in the MV. Nu'est appearance are also as acceptable. They're older so they fit well as employees at the company. Frankly, I don't understand the need of Giae, an OC in this fic since it already has numerous of characters. If she is created for advising Daniel, I think any of Daniel's close friends can do that —preferably Jisung or Jaehwan since they know Daniel's backstory and would suit very well for said dialogues— but she never interrupted any scenes or spoil the plot or a turnoff or whatsoever so yeah. She's all right.

The plot overall is great. The way you express the characters' emotions & describe each scenes are good. I'm satisfied with the story & the ending.

Grammatical errors can still be spotted but your vocabulary is good. Misspelling is also visible here and there (I assume they're mistyped words instead of misspelled) but as I said, it doesn't ruin the story at all. So don't worry too much (but it's better if you take a look at them once you have the time and do some tweaks to the typo words) Also, I suggest you change the title from "HEARTSTRING" to "Heart Strings" nothing drastic actually, just the change of the capital letters and a space sot would look decent (not that the caps lock isn't, it just doesn't look right or captivating much)

You're very potential to be an excellent author. Don't give up & keep going on, okay? You've done a great job for this. I apologize if my comment offends you (some say I'm too blunt on criticizing/reviewing/commenting on fanfics) and taking a large space at the comment section. I'm always like this when it comes to fics I approve lmao. I like your poster too. Little Daniel & Seongwoo are very cute (did you watch the kids' audition on Wanna One Go? It was very impressive)

Okay, so I gotta stop talking now. Thank you for sharing this with all of us. We appreciate it very much. Keep on going forward :)
ephemeral_sm #8
Chapter 14: The ending is real great!! Double thumbs up for you! I wish i can give more thou.... Really good job you've done there authornimmm. Thank you for this touching story ^^
hisnoona #9
Chapter 14: YEAYYY COMPLETED!!!!!!!! thanks for completing this story and updated reguraly and thank you for writing about wanna one. Its really hard to find story about wanna one that have a good story and or not . I know maybe its only about preference and out there maybe there are a lot story bout wannaone. But actually its hard to find a story that fit my style. So i'm glad you make it. Thank you!!! Cheers!