My First Dream.....

Dreams In A Cloud

HEYLOO!!!! francin200 here for the first installment of my collection.

I wrote this poem for a car crash victim in my mom's ward. She lost her fiance in the crash and I happened to deliver some food in her room and found her crying. We talked for a bit and she told me their love story.......well, as expected, I cried :) So here it is... ENJOY :)

 

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I dream if a paradise where you've taken me

You held me through the nights, you couldn't set me free.

But honey, dreams are meant to be shattered

Now nightmares envelope me as I lay in bed, battered.

 

My dreams, as beautiful as the love we made,

Now give me pain and tears, cutting me like a cold, sharp blade.

Oh how I long for your warm touch, ypur piercing eyes

The blue that used to witness our union, now turn into dark skies.

 

My love, where are you now?

Breathe, live, tell me how?

Your loving smile that kept me alive has now left me blinded.

How can you leave me, our love behind?

 

Storms came, they broke me

Without your touch, I'm left with nothing.

This was not what I bargained for, now I'm broken, can't you see?

Since you left me, My heart will forever be weeping

It's hard to say my last goodbye

Look down on me as I hold my head up high.

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dreamweaver #1
Your poems are really goood. I suggest you edit your tags. Delete some of the groups and replace it with poems or poetry, oneshot and request ^0^ Continue writing!
Perpetual_love
#2
OMO. *A moment of silence* Wow I am speechless. That was fantastic dear. I love the plot. For a second I acutally that I was going to die due to con heart disease. But I didn't so I jubilant about it. I adore your writing technique the strong use of vocabulary and descriptive scenes that has the ability to paint vivid images in my mind. You portrayed Joonie really well in the story. I couldn't have put his personality any other way. I am happy that Bianca set things straight with JiHoon at the end. And OMO is their daughter so cute. (:<br />
Thanks so much darling for the amazing oneshot. (: Your writing never fails to impress me.
Kia-Nature-Ra
#3
HOLY EFFIN SHIZ.<br />
OMG.<br />
u hav NO CLUE how HONOURED am i that SUCH A FLIPPING AMAZING STORY WAS DEDICATED TO ME!!!!!!!!!!!!!<br />
Sry, i HAD to scream that one out loud<br />
but OMGOMGOGMOGMOGMG<br />
that story is BY FAR MY FAVEEEEEEE story BY FRIKKIN FAR<br />
omg! Why are u apologizing again???<br />
that is SOOO AMAZING<br />
OMG! the wait is SOOO worthwhile!<br />
SOOOOOOOOOOOO SAD TOO :(<br />
And i RELY felt sad for Jonghyun too!<br />
what a beautiful twisted love story that was<br />
SOOOOO very creative<br />
OMG<br />
u left me breathless<br />
not to mention teary eyed<br />
ABSOLUTELY AAMZINGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG~
Crystalls #4
i never fail to cry at ur stories!! T.T<br />
oh my *sob*<br />
please update soon <3
MusicMyLove #5
Oh my GOD!!! GIRL!!! i cant stop crying right now. jeez seriously, i havent had a story move me so much in a long time. omg its so hard trying to write this comment right now. oh gosh, i dont even know what to say or how to begin. <br />
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you're story is so bittersweet--more bitter than sweet. actually, more heartbreaking. gosh, i still cant get over the fact that I/Mayumi died and left him! i am so crushed right now. i can definitely feel jaejoong's pain. i absolutely melt at mushiness and whatnot but this story really pierced through my heart. but no matter how much im hurting right now, i still enjoyed reading it. you are an amazing writer! you are really good at writing bittersweet stories. thank you so much for writing it for me!<br />
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P.S. oh gosh im still pretty teary-eyed. my roommate just walked in and asked me why i was crying and she gave me a hug lol. oh look what you've done to me now!
strawberryjae5
#6
i am crying like a crazy girl now T_________________T soooo sweet yet heart breaking ...i can't tell you how much i loved it. the vows the massage she left him .each one complete the other.. thank you sooo much i really really really appreciate it. you are an amazing writer keep going & i wish u all the luck. <br />
Ps: i will read all your amazing fics & now i am loving the last too fics ^^
Kia-Nature-Ra
#7
*slaps self in the face*<br />
...oh.my.god.<br />
*strts crying*<br />
that was beautifulllllll~<br />
RLY beautiful <br />
bittersweet<br />
Luved how u reversed it from the mv,<br />
and did SUCH a beautiful job w/ it!
sweetsammora
#8
Thank you soo much for cold summer, ABSOLUTELY AMAZING!<br />
loved it..x
nao2483 #9
Request for One-shot ^ ^~<br />
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Username: chaelin08<br />
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Characters/biases: Karen, Jaejoong <br />
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Desired Plot: Karen is a fan of DBSK (especially Jaejoong), she has never got a chance to go to one of their concerts before, the closet shes been to jaejoong was watching him on youtube videos. She frequently dreams of<br />
Jaejoong going out with her.<br />
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It is another day, time to go to sleep, the in the dream she is in a house (Jaejoong's house) sleeping in a bed that has Black sheets, and white pillows, the room was white, and there was an alarm clock on the side table next to the bed on the right, in the dream Jaejoong kisses her on the forehead and tells her to get up from sleeping and to go eat breakfast that he was almost finished making.<br />
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Karen wakes up from the dream (glad that she had another dream about jaejoong) but WAIT, she looks around the room she woke up in, black bedsheets, white pillows, alarm clock on the side table next to the bed on the right? and she smells something cooking in the kitchen... OMG did her dream become reality once she woke up? O 0 O" <br />
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Rated or Not: Not rated<br />
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thanks ~ and good luck on ur fics and poems ^ ^~
francin200
#10
thanks :) SWEET DREAMS!