Chapter Six

A Matter of the Heart
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(Sandeul's POV)

Sandeul ran over to Dongwoo as quickly as possible moving his hand to take the helmet off. As he was reaching for the strap, he heard Jinyoung shout from behind him. "Don't take it off yet. We need to check him and see how badly he's injured. If you move him too much, it could be very bad," he gently pushed Sandeul back and began checking Dongwoo over. He was still unconscious and bleeding on his arm. Jinyoung didn't see any blood coming out of the helmet, so he was guessing that his friend didn't have a cut on his head. Reaching down, he felt all of Dongwoo's limbs, satisfied when he didn't feel any broken bones. 

Glancing at Sandeul, he sighed. "He seems stable enough to move, so we can take him to the cabin. He needs to warm up, before he goes into shock."

Sandeul bit his lip nervously, nodding. "Okay." He helped Jinyoung carry Dongwoo to the cabin, where they opened the door and lay him on one of the beds. Jinyoung began ping the ski suit, checking to see if Dongwoo was warm enough underneath it. 

 Sandeul handed him a towel and a few thermal blankets. Jinyoung didn't say a word as they tried to draw some warmth back into their friend. After a few minutes, Jinyoung unbuckled the helmet and removed it carefully. Dongwoo's hair was plastered to his face and he had a cut. From what Jinyoung could see, the cut wasn’t serious. He also had a bruise on his temple where the helmet had hit the tree. 

While Jinyoung continued to try to warm up the injured man, Sandeul dialed 911. The call didn't go through, since he didn't have service. Growling in frustration, he walked a few steps away and tried it again. Still no service. 

Turning to Jinyoung, he shook his head. "No service. We need to get help and there's no ING SERVICE!" He threw his phone against the wall. "What now?" He was so frustrated that he was almost in tears. 

Jinyoung checked Dongwoo's pulse again, then smiled at Sandeul. The younger man was going hysterical with worry. "He seems okay, other than being unconscious…as far as I can tell. All we can do is continue to keep him warm and dry. I'll try calling with my phone." He pulled it out and dialed 911. It went through almost immediately, and he told the operator the situation and their location. She informed him that help would be there within twenty minutes. They just needed to sit tight and keep an eye on him.

Sandeul sighed, sitting down on a chair. He looked very distressed. "This wasn't supposed to happen...damn it." He blinked back tears, and Jinyoung smiled, touching his arm. Sandeul stiffened, pulling away. Jinyoung didn't let him go, drawing the other man to him. Sandeul melted into his arms, letting the tears fall. Jinyoung his hair, trying to sooth him. Sandeul was very tender. "He’ll be okay. I promise. Also…I know you're mad at me, for some reason, and I'm just wondering why. Is it about last night when you saw me with my date?" He studied Sandeul's face, smiling. "It didn't work out...so I wouldn't be hurting Dongwoo. I know that he likes me, but I've never seen him that way. He's a friend, and nothing more."

Sandeul shook his head, annoyed that the subject had come up. "You know, I REALLY like him...but he only sees you. I guess we all lose out on this one." He touched Dongwoo's face, the emotion on his face showing much more than his words could.

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Amalya
#1
Chapter 8: I did enjoy this overall. The writing is definitely solid and I don't think I found many (if any) typos so kudos there. It's also a pretty well thought out plot, though the love triangle scenario is nothing new. However, the little twists with the secret admirer and whatnot gave it a slightly different spin, even if he was rather obvious. lol It was fun to see Sandeul open up bit by bit though. And it really set things up for the ending rather neatly.

I will say that things felt like they moved a bit quickly. It was always as if we were landing right in the middle of what was changing or happening without a great deal of development. While it keeps the story moving so that you don't run the risk of it feeling slow or that it's dragging, it also felt like we were skipping scenes that could have added more insight into the characters.

I have no problem with the switching POV's, especially since you made sure to let us know when there was a change up, but I would recommend keeping person specific reactions to the person in mind, especially when the other speaker is nowhere in sight. What I mean by that is when one person (like Dongwoo) is having a text conversation with a friend (I think it was Jinyoung), he wouldn't have been able to see the latter 'smiling' even if he was since they were separated at the time. Also, you may want to double check in the first chapter with Sandeul disappearing in the crowd but then a little further down you have him still at the bar.

I enjoyed the resolution though and it's a nice change from having someone left out as I might have expected initially. I don't know that the was needed but seeing them sort of work things out the way they did was enjoyable in the end. So good job on finishing it and getting everything smoothed out. I'm still kind of curious who hosted the party in the beginning to start with but for the most part, my questions were all answered in the story. Thank you for sharing!
amccurdy31 #2
Chapter 1: my poor sanduel it kills me to see him like this. even in a fic
MisheeFrancheska
#3
Chapter 8: ok ?. where am I ?! hehe~ ngl .. I love your fic. so much and hope u know tat! . I just kind of feel like .. the whole story is a bit In rush ?. . idk anymore ! hoho. and the kills me ! I didn't expect that at all ! .and *sobs* at my Deullie forever the bottom !! .. I'm not complaining thought ! ohoho
Ladyqueen #4
Chapter 8: Uh, it has ended:((
I really enjoyed reading your story, but I would like to hive some feedback and also to say some things, I didn't like that much.
To begin with something I didn't like that much, I'm not a fan of first POV, I like third POV more, but that's just my personal opinion, so it's fine :)
And the second point is relatad to the first, because in my opinion changing the POV much, makes the story uneasy to read, but like the first point, that's just my opinion.
The last point would be the timeskip that you added. It's not easy to write something like this, because people change and because of that their relation to each other changes to, so a timeskip can be confusing, but in this story... I don't like it, but I don't dislike it, either.
To come to the positiv things (don't think I just wanted to criticize you, there were many good things as well) the idea was reslly cute, kind of main but that's not something bad. You said that many readers were confused but I personally don't think it was hard to get. I'm really sad that the story has already ended and I hope that you'll write more B1A4 stories, so hope to se you again ^^

(And sorry for the long comment)
MisheeFrancheska
#5
Chapter 6: JinDeul FTW ! ^^. tysm for this update !
Ladyqueen #6
Chapter 6: Poor dongwoonie, but thanks to sandeul and jinyoung, he is ok, now...
I hope he'll fall for sandeul soon, but I'm a little afraid that when he falls for sandeul, sandeul has already fallen for his admirer...
But even though: THANK YOU, you really updated!
I can't wait for the next chapter ^^
Ladyqueen #7
Chapter 3: Hey there~
i really like this story and your idea. I hope you upload the new chapter fast, because I love reading this fic. Poor Sandeulie, I hope, in the end he'll be able to get my cute Dongwoo...
However, I'll look foreward for the new chapter :)
MisheeFrancheska
#8
Chapter 3: yay ! I love this update ! ^^v . so glad that Jinyoung might have some feelings towards Deullie !