Chapter Two

A Matter of the Heart
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 (Sandeul's POV) The next morning, Sandeul woke up to his phone blaring Block B's "Very Good" beside his head. "ing hell!" He grumbled, throwing his phone across the room. He had forgotten to turn it down...or OFF. With all the alcohol he had consumed the night before, he would prefer off right now. Covering his head with his pillow, he tried to go back to sleep. That was when his worries about if it was a family member that really needed to get a hold of him or a friend that just couldn't wait for the hangover to be gone and text later. If it were the latter, he could leave it. They could go jump off a cliff right now. He began to drift off again, when his phone went started blaring again.    Growling, he got out of his bed and walked over to pick up his stupid phone. Glaring at it, he cursed again when he saw that it was from Gongchan. All he wanted was Baro's number. Why didn't he think of getting it himself when he was flirting up a storm? Punching in the numbers, he didn't bother saying anything else in the text. Gongchan may not understand that he had stayed up drinking away his pain after the party he had been dragged to. He was just in a sour mood because someone else wanted the person HE wanted.    He stumbled into the bathroom and the shower. He would hopefully feel better after he got cleaned up from his drunkenness last night. He felt better afterward, physically and mentally. Grabbing his phone, he texted Gongchan and asked him if he wanted to go out on a date with Baro. He could easily set that up. However, when Gongchan replied, his mood began to slip again. The younger man had suggested going on a double date with Jinyoung and Dongwoo…and maybe finding someone for Sandeul, too. He was sad that Gongchan had picked up on Dongwoo’s crush on Jinyoung, so told him that they might want to go out with himself and Baro, as friends. He would do all he could to keep them in the friend zone, where Jinyoung obviously wanted to be, anyway. It was just his sweet Dongwoo that wanted Jinyoung and had for quite some time now.    Getting dressed, he grabbed his backpack and a granola bar on his way out the door. He would be late for class…again.   

 

(Dongwoo’s POV) Dongwoo looked at the shelves in the store. He desperately needed groceries and was sad that Jinyoung couldn’t go with him. He was shopping all by himself, but it gave him time to think about this situation with Jinyoung and Sandeul. They didn’t seem to get along last night, as he had been hoping they would. He had thought that Sandeul would be Jinyoung’s type, but Sandeul had
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Amalya
#1
Chapter 8: I did enjoy this overall. The writing is definitely solid and I don't think I found many (if any) typos so kudos there. It's also a pretty well thought out plot, though the love triangle scenario is nothing new. However, the little twists with the secret admirer and whatnot gave it a slightly different spin, even if he was rather obvious. lol It was fun to see Sandeul open up bit by bit though. And it really set things up for the ending rather neatly.

I will say that things felt like they moved a bit quickly. It was always as if we were landing right in the middle of what was changing or happening without a great deal of development. While it keeps the story moving so that you don't run the risk of it feeling slow or that it's dragging, it also felt like we were skipping scenes that could have added more insight into the characters.

I have no problem with the switching POV's, especially since you made sure to let us know when there was a change up, but I would recommend keeping person specific reactions to the person in mind, especially when the other speaker is nowhere in sight. What I mean by that is when one person (like Dongwoo) is having a text conversation with a friend (I think it was Jinyoung), he wouldn't have been able to see the latter 'smiling' even if he was since they were separated at the time. Also, you may want to double check in the first chapter with Sandeul disappearing in the crowd but then a little further down you have him still at the bar.

I enjoyed the resolution though and it's a nice change from having someone left out as I might have expected initially. I don't know that the was needed but seeing them sort of work things out the way they did was enjoyable in the end. So good job on finishing it and getting everything smoothed out. I'm still kind of curious who hosted the party in the beginning to start with but for the most part, my questions were all answered in the story. Thank you for sharing!
amccurdy31 #2
Chapter 1: my poor sanduel it kills me to see him like this. even in a fic
MisheeFrancheska
#3
Chapter 8: ok ?. where am I ?! hehe~ ngl .. I love your fic. so much and hope u know tat! . I just kind of feel like .. the whole story is a bit In rush ?. . idk anymore ! hoho. and the kills me ! I didn't expect that at all ! .and *sobs* at my Deullie forever the bottom !! .. I'm not complaining thought ! ohoho
Ladyqueen #4
Chapter 8: Uh, it has ended:((
I really enjoyed reading your story, but I would like to hive some feedback and also to say some things, I didn't like that much.
To begin with something I didn't like that much, I'm not a fan of first POV, I like third POV more, but that's just my personal opinion, so it's fine :)
And the second point is relatad to the first, because in my opinion changing the POV much, makes the story uneasy to read, but like the first point, that's just my opinion.
The last point would be the timeskip that you added. It's not easy to write something like this, because people change and because of that their relation to each other changes to, so a timeskip can be confusing, but in this story... I don't like it, but I don't dislike it, either.
To come to the positiv things (don't think I just wanted to criticize you, there were many good things as well) the idea was reslly cute, kind of main but that's not something bad. You said that many readers were confused but I personally don't think it was hard to get. I'm really sad that the story has already ended and I hope that you'll write more B1A4 stories, so hope to se you again ^^

(And sorry for the long comment)
MisheeFrancheska
#5
Chapter 6: JinDeul FTW ! ^^. tysm for this update !
Ladyqueen #6
Chapter 6: Poor dongwoonie, but thanks to sandeul and jinyoung, he is ok, now...
I hope he'll fall for sandeul soon, but I'm a little afraid that when he falls for sandeul, sandeul has already fallen for his admirer...
But even though: THANK YOU, you really updated!
I can't wait for the next chapter ^^
Ladyqueen #7
Chapter 3: Hey there~
i really like this story and your idea. I hope you upload the new chapter fast, because I love reading this fic. Poor Sandeulie, I hope, in the end he'll be able to get my cute Dongwoo...
However, I'll look foreward for the new chapter :)
MisheeFrancheska
#8
Chapter 3: yay ! I love this update ! ^^v . so glad that Jinyoung might have some feelings towards Deullie !