Chapter Five

A Matter of the Heart
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(Dongwoo’s POV) That afternoon, Dongwoo sat in his kitchen, pacing, wondering of he should call Jinyoung and just tell him that he actually did like him as more than a friend. It was starting to bother him, especially since he hadn’t been drunk when they had . He had been a bit hung over and SHOULD have felt bad about taking advantage of his friend’s drunkenness. He didn’t, because he was in love with Jinyoung. How do you tell someone you are in love with them, when they have been your friend for many years and they haven’t seen you in the same way? then you go and have drunken with ‘said friend.’ It was a bad situation all together, and one that just needed to be ignored.  That was the best way around it.   Picking up his phone, he texted Gongchan. ‘Hey, dongsaeng. What would you do if you made a mistake that you couldn’t undo, but didn’t regret? What if it was with a good friend? Also, what if your friend is interested in someone else and not you?’ Hitting the send button, he put his phone in his pocket and began cleaning up his neglected kitchen. After putting food away, he started on the dishes. He got a reply to his text when his hands were in the water. Rinsing the dishes, he dried his hands off and picked up his phone again.    ‘Dongwoo, I would just leave things with Jinyoungie alone. If he likes someone else, it’s a lost cause. Just move on and find someone else to be attracted to. There are plenty of people who like you. Go for one of them. I’m sorry, hyung, but you shouldn’t mess with someone who is already into someone else.’   Dongwoo cringed. Gongchan always had harsh answers, and it was a risk to text him. However, he wanted the truth, and Gongchan was the best person for truth. ‘Thanks, Gongchan…But what if I already slept with him? Is he possibly avoiding me?’   ‘LOL. No, silly hyung. He doesn’t remember a damn thing about you ing. Even if he DID, he would just write it off as a good night and nothing else. Sorry.’   Rolling his eyes, Dongwoo simply replied with a ‘Thanks, dude.’ He got the answer he had been expecting from his friend. He went back to his cleaning and didn’t think about it again. As Gongchan put it ‘it was a lost cause.’ Texting Jinyoung, he asked him if he wanted to go skiing that weekend. He was happy when his friend agreed and they set the beginning for Friday morning. He was excited about it now.   (Sandeul’s POV)  That evening, Sandeul went to a cheap diner for dinner. He was surprised when he saw Jinyoung there also…with someone other than Dongwoo. He thought he had remembered his friend telling him that they were together. He also may have been drunk at the time, so Dongwoo may have just told him that he LIKED Jinyoung. Maybe Jinyoung didn’t feel the same way. Walking over to the table, he smiled at Jinyoung. “Hi. May I speak with you for a moment?”   Jinyoung looked surprised. “Um…sure. I’ll be back in a moment.” He smiled at the other man, who nodded. They shared a ‘look’ and Sandeul frowned. Once they were a good distance from the other guy, Sandeul cocked his head. “Hey, do you even REALIZE that Dongwoo likes you? Are you so blind that you don’t even see it? I thought he was your best friend. He really likes you, and you are going to screw it up.”   Jinyoung laughed bitterly. “I barely know you and you think you’re the authority on who I date…or for if Dongwoo likes me? If he really does, he should say something. You sound like you’re just jealous or something.”   Sandeul shook his head. Jiny
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Amalya
#1
Chapter 8: I did enjoy this overall. The writing is definitely solid and I don't think I found many (if any) typos so kudos there. It's also a pretty well thought out plot, though the love triangle scenario is nothing new. However, the little twists with the secret admirer and whatnot gave it a slightly different spin, even if he was rather obvious. lol It was fun to see Sandeul open up bit by bit though. And it really set things up for the ending rather neatly.

I will say that things felt like they moved a bit quickly. It was always as if we were landing right in the middle of what was changing or happening without a great deal of development. While it keeps the story moving so that you don't run the risk of it feeling slow or that it's dragging, it also felt like we were skipping scenes that could have added more insight into the characters.

I have no problem with the switching POV's, especially since you made sure to let us know when there was a change up, but I would recommend keeping person specific reactions to the person in mind, especially when the other speaker is nowhere in sight. What I mean by that is when one person (like Dongwoo) is having a text conversation with a friend (I think it was Jinyoung), he wouldn't have been able to see the latter 'smiling' even if he was since they were separated at the time. Also, you may want to double check in the first chapter with Sandeul disappearing in the crowd but then a little further down you have him still at the bar.

I enjoyed the resolution though and it's a nice change from having someone left out as I might have expected initially. I don't know that the was needed but seeing them sort of work things out the way they did was enjoyable in the end. So good job on finishing it and getting everything smoothed out. I'm still kind of curious who hosted the party in the beginning to start with but for the most part, my questions were all answered in the story. Thank you for sharing!
amccurdy31 #2
Chapter 1: my poor sanduel it kills me to see him like this. even in a fic
MisheeFrancheska
#3
Chapter 8: ok ?. where am I ?! hehe~ ngl .. I love your fic. so much and hope u know tat! . I just kind of feel like .. the whole story is a bit In rush ?. . idk anymore ! hoho. and the kills me ! I didn't expect that at all ! .and *sobs* at my Deullie forever the bottom !! .. I'm not complaining thought ! ohoho
Ladyqueen #4
Chapter 8: Uh, it has ended:((
I really enjoyed reading your story, but I would like to hive some feedback and also to say some things, I didn't like that much.
To begin with something I didn't like that much, I'm not a fan of first POV, I like third POV more, but that's just my personal opinion, so it's fine :)
And the second point is relatad to the first, because in my opinion changing the POV much, makes the story uneasy to read, but like the first point, that's just my opinion.
The last point would be the timeskip that you added. It's not easy to write something like this, because people change and because of that their relation to each other changes to, so a timeskip can be confusing, but in this story... I don't like it, but I don't dislike it, either.
To come to the positiv things (don't think I just wanted to criticize you, there were many good things as well) the idea was reslly cute, kind of main but that's not something bad. You said that many readers were confused but I personally don't think it was hard to get. I'm really sad that the story has already ended and I hope that you'll write more B1A4 stories, so hope to se you again ^^

(And sorry for the long comment)
MisheeFrancheska
#5
Chapter 6: JinDeul FTW ! ^^. tysm for this update !
Ladyqueen #6
Chapter 6: Poor dongwoonie, but thanks to sandeul and jinyoung, he is ok, now...
I hope he'll fall for sandeul soon, but I'm a little afraid that when he falls for sandeul, sandeul has already fallen for his admirer...
But even though: THANK YOU, you really updated!
I can't wait for the next chapter ^^
Ladyqueen #7
Chapter 3: Hey there~
i really like this story and your idea. I hope you upload the new chapter fast, because I love reading this fic. Poor Sandeulie, I hope, in the end he'll be able to get my cute Dongwoo...
However, I'll look foreward for the new chapter :)
MisheeFrancheska
#8
Chapter 3: yay ! I love this update ! ^^v . so glad that Jinyoung might have some feelings towards Deullie !