Forevermore by serendipity-- 

Review by baconpanda13

Title → (14/15) 

For me, the title is an important role in a story. It has to be eye catching to grab a readers attention and make them think, Wow, I want to find out what this story is about! 
Your title was perfect because it tied in with the story. I'm actually glad you changed the story title from I Love You Baekhyun, Forevermore to Forevermore. Even though it wouldn't catch a reader's eye in a crowd of titles, it was still nice.


First Impressions → (18/20)

Your description doesn't give out too much of the story, but you could easily guess what the story is about. When you add the words "he's so much more than that" readers could guess that Baekhyun would become a love interest to Chanyeol, but it grabbed people's attention and made them want to read it. Your poster fit in perfectly with your story and I loved the quote you put in.


Language → (10/10) 

You can say I'm over reacting, but your language was perfect. There were barely any mistakes in grammar and punctuation, and the way you wrote the story makes readers beg for more. You had no mistakes at all in spelling either.
So to put it into simpler words, you wrote beautifully.


Flow and Consistency → (20/20)

Your story flowed perfectly and there were no times where you rushed the story line too much. That's really all I can say; it was perfect.


Storyline → (18/20) 

The plot line of immortality is cliche, but you transformed it into something completely different. I loved the way you wrote the scenes and how you described things. Your story was unique.
I loved the ending, although a reader could predict what would happen. The twist was a great idea to the plot, and I liked how they didn't end up happily ever after like in most stories. 



Characters → (10/10)

I absolutely loved how you described the characters. You described Chanyeol's character perfectly, about how he didn't interact with humans often and what had made him suddenly find an interest in Baekhyun. I loved how you focused more on how their relationship was improving and how Chanyeol slowly began to open in to Baekhyun.



Entertainment → (10/10)

I'm going to be honest here: I loved this story. I'm not just saying that because I love Baekyeol, but because your story made me want to never stop reading it. I loved the way you told the story and I loved how you added the twist at the end.
Your story has definately made its way onto my favorites list.

Total → (100/105)

Ooh, so y~ keep up the good work!

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Reviewed by baconpanda13

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