fashionista-gurl ; My Byuntae Butler, Kris!

• Title [5/5]:
• I think that the title goes perfectly with the story. It is very cute and it really captured my and most people’s attention. I am not a huge fan of putting names it titles but I think that with this story it is fine and I have no complaints.

• Foreword/Description [9/10]:
• I did really like the foreword/description. I kind of laughed at the description, in a good way though. You gave well written descriptions of the characters too. The only thing was on Kris’ and Sehun’s.
• Kris:
• He likes to tease you because of your expressions, which is really cute. *skip* He’s a little byuntae to you just to tease you for fun. (You really don’t need the “for fun”.) *skip* His the number one person you hate because he’s smarter than you… (Should be “He’s”).
• Sehun:
• Has a secret no one knows. (Should be ‘no one knows about”)

• Appearance [5/5]:
• I think I this is one of the cutest posters I’ve seen. It is a simple poster but sometimes simple is a good thing. I do really like the pictures because they portray the characters really well. Kris looks like a butler with his suit and Soora looks like she has a fashion sense. I also really like the color of the poster, it is a cute pink. I somewhat like the background. It is kind of boring but overall it is fine.

• Plot [15/15]:
• I really do love your plot. I have seen many plots like this before though but I think this is one of the best. It was extremely interesting and I just keep on wanting to read more. You only have one chapter but already you have captured my attention, which is pretty hard to do.
• Originality [14/15]:
• I haven’t seen a whole lot of butler stories but I have seen some.

• Spelling/Grammar [19/20]:
• I really only found two mistakes after reading it aloud to myself.
• Just in time, you were just outside ‘Calvin and Keith.’ (It’s ok but it would sound better if it was something like, “As if by a miracle…”
• A passer-by said after checking your butler is still alive. (Should be a ‘if’ after checking and is should be ‘was’)

• Flow [10/10]:
• The flow overall was pretty good. I thought it was a little random at first when she was suddenly kidnapped but then I reread the description and then I felt stupid. But the flow was great.

• Characters [10/10]:
• I really like what you did with the characters, especially Sehun’s and Soojin’s characters. I really like Sehun’s because he has a secret no one knows and that really helps the reader’s curiosity.

• Overall Enjoyment [10/10]:
• Overall I really really enjoy reading it, even if it is just one chapter. I was really laughing at those kidnappers being SNSD fans and the part where the butler got hit in the face with the shoe and the part where she meet Kris and I’m going to stop now. So yeah, I really enjoyed the story.

• Score: 97/100
• Marking Scores Grading Sheet:
• 91 and above - A*
• 85-90 - A+
• 75-84 - A
• 74-69 - B+
• 68-63 - B
• 62-60 - B-
• 59-54 - C+
• 54-50 - C
• 50-40 - D
• 40-1 - U graded.

You got 97%! Welldone!

reviewed by nicoleskittycoke; ordinary review shop

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Love, Hana (kris-wifey)