Pieces of My Heart

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My heart is with so many people. With each person that leaves me behind. They each take a piece. How do you understand who plans to take care of thier piece?

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Foreword

Hyuna is a young girl just trying to understand who the people around her are. No one in life is who they say they are. When things start to get complicated, she must decide who is in it  because they truley care for her and who is in it for the benefits of having her as a friend.

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inspiritdawn #1
Great story!
sooboo #2
Chapter 6: hyokwang??????
JustHyunafan #3
Chapter 6: I really like the friendship between Hyuna Krystal and Hyosung.
ToAnyonevip #4
Chapter 6: WOOOH YOU UPDATED.
There are alot of fics that don't update often and I lose interest after a while but for some reason I'm still hooked and I just really lile this fic haha.
Nikki4b2uty #5
Chapter 5: I knew it! No one is ever that nice just because they love someone. Poor Krystal, and now Hyuna is running around like a crazy person just to find her!
Nikki4b2uty #6
Chapter 4: I have a bad feeling about the junhyung/krystal thing! No guy I have ever met is sweet like that just beause they 'love someone' and how he acted after the dinner...idk. Finally we know a little about jay :) cant wait for the next chap!
Nikki4b2uty #7
Chapter 3: Im here for the hyuna/jay side...i dont really know krystal...but im interested in seeing the hyuna and jay thing develop! :) update again soon!
cheap_imitation #8
Chapter 2: OMG. A Jay/Hyuna centred piece??! YES PLEASE. I AM HERE FOR THAT lol. They're my two ultimate biases so to have them potentially paired off (even if its fanfic) is making me all kinds of happy haha.
Ok, so overall I think your story and your writing style has heaps of potential. I love that I could feel the immediate "connection" between Hyuna and Jay. I do think it's a bit soon of her to go around saying that she has feelings for him because my impression is that she is simply very attracted and INTRIGUED by him. I would have liked you to play that up a bit more and really flesh out her confused feelings which you did make a great start with. Perhaps have a moment where she observes him and really takes a moment to sort her thoughts and feelings out.
I'm curious about Jay's "story" - surely there must be some reason behind him being bullied and ostracised and I can't wait to see where you take that. It's such a huge change from the overly confident and popular Jay Park in real life lol.
Hyosung is also a nice touch - I find that she was a bit over the top at times but I loved that she KNEW it and she owned up to it. That she pretty much admits she lashes out and takes control and is mean because she feels inferior and insecure. I want to see what her "plan" is because I thought she'd have control issues and not want Hyuna and Jay together.
Kikwang is adorable and I'm really liking his friendship with Hyuna - I'm such a huge shipper of Jay/Hyuna that I don't really want to see any love triangles introduced hahaha. But yeh - I'd love to see more of him and Hyosung. It seems he's not afraid to call her out and I can see a bit of a hate/love relationship there.
I'll be sure to keep an eye on this story~ Please continue updating :) You're doing a great job so far!
Nikki4b2uty #9
Chapter 2: Awww kikwang under your awkwardness you are really sweet. Ew hyosung lol a little humility wouldnt harm you. Update again soon!
Nikki4b2uty #10
Chapter 1: Omg so far I love it. Hyuna shouldnt try so hard to find out the bad things in him. Instead she should get to know him...from him. I really dont want her to pick on him like the others. All fics make hyuna the bad girl and I love reading the ones that actually make her nice and kind! Im really looking forward to reading more...lol the conversation with kikwang was hilarious though! Please update again soon!
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