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It Started with a Promise
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Mika's POV

 "Jessica." I gasped.

 She looks scary. If looks can kill, I may be dead now.

 "Mika." she said.

 "Unnie--"

 "Unnie your face! Don't you even call me unnie!" she said.

 It was only us so no one can actually see us or even hear us.

 "I told you not to stand against me." she said, "Why?"

 "What do you mean?" I asked.

 "Don't play stupid ! I told you not to date Key coz he is mine!" she said.

 "But you don't own Key." I said.

 She lean in closer to me, and I slowly step back.

 "Look Mika, I love Key and both of us are meant for each other." she paused, "Why did you take him away from me?" she said as she twirled my hair.

 "I didn't take him away from you." cold sweat broke onto my forehead, "He was the one who moved away from you." I said.

 She pushed me away that I fell on the ground.

 "!" she hissed, "Break up with him or else I'll make you suffer."

 I was scared by her facial reaction, she changed. The sweet angelic face turned into a vengeful demon who throws deathly glares at people.

 "Unnie--" I uttered.

 "I told you not to call me unnie! You little brat!" she yelled.

 "But, we're both in love." I said.

 "Are you really pissing me off?" she said and walk towards me, she pulled me up "Stay away from Key!" she said, her grip was so tight. I didn't know that she's this strong.

 "I'm hurt" I said.

 "You'll feel more pain if you don't stay away from Key!" she said as she slapped and pushed me even hard on the ground, "Break up with him!" she said.

 "I can't. No I won't" I refused.

 She held my face tight, "Look at me ! Leave him or you'll suffer!" she said, "Think it over!" then she stood up and left.

 Tears started to roll down my face. How come Jessica is this mean? I thought she was nice and kind. Behind her mask lies a demon.

 I stood up, there was a scratch

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Issdnn
#1
Chapter 92: Okay, I'm reading this on 2015 and you probably won't reply my comment but oh well, at least I've tried to tell my thoughts to you.
I read ALL of the chapters without exception. Actually I agree with the review that said the flow is really fast. I think there's not too many confilcts, or which I should say that you're stuck with one conflict and you bring it for so many chapters and it does not really interesting because some of the readers probably have guessed what would happen next (like Jessica's conflict). And I actually hope you could extend the part where Yui and Jonghyun getting along with each other (as a side story because I really think it's interesting) rather than bringing Jessica's case for too long (Key and Mika have 2 fights because Jessica, am I right?)
HOWEVER, I think this story is not as bad as the reviewer's think. I enjoy and understand quite much, but I do agree that sometimes it seems unrealistic. Well, for the typo I COMPLETELY understand. I know some people can't write on Microsoft Office Word for some reasons (actually I've been writing through Memopad, Email, etc.)
And for grammar and vocabulary, I think it's not that bad too. For people who doesn't speak English (me too), I think THE VERY FIRST POINT is people UNDERSTAND what you're trying to say. No matter it's a mix past and present tense (okay I know IT IS ACTUALLY NOT GOOD), the most important thing (esp for amateur) is people get what you mean. BECAUSE IT WILL BE USELESS TO FOCUS JUST ON THE PAST/PRESENT TENSE. (Pls do not misunderstood of what I mean)
And lastly, I just want to tell you that there are some people think that they made stories to please others, to satisfy others. However, there are some people too that think they made stories to satisfy themselves, for their needs. And I'm the second. I choose to write to satisfy my needs. I care for other's opinions, I considerate their words within my stories. I'm trying to be open BUT it should not affect my ideas.
Good job♡
-2Mirae-
14 streak #2
Chapter 92: even though the person who reviewed this story said she couldnt continue finishing i thought the story was awesome ^^ even though you have a bit of grammar mistake you could correct yourself next time ^^
i really enjoyed reading this ^^
locketblingermvp #3
Chapter 92: Wow... it's my third time reading... and wow.... i love it... SOOOO MUCH! Thank youuuuuuuu!! U r awesummmmmmm
kekeSHINee
#4
Chapter 23: Ur description is perfect... Can i ask u to help my first story which i oni update til 1/3 of chapter 3
YunYing
#5
Woah! Yup updated 11 chapters a day? That's so amazing!!!
YunYing
#6
Awww, I really LOVE this story!
Michellesofjan #7
kyaa i really love this story
Bright5
#8
I love this story^^
alyssa27 #9
It's getting more and more and more exciting..... Love this story!
SISA95
#10
Nice Story Or should i say AMAZING!!!<br />
i like it so much i finished it just in two days ^^ <br />
KEEP IT UP :)