Remembering Kevin -- ParkKimi
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Author Link: ParkKimi
Title: ( 5/5) – Was it eye catching? Fabulous? Too common? Too plain? Was it capitalized properly? –
I really like it. It definitely gives off that angsty feel.
Foreword & Description: ( 9/10) – Did it grab attention? Was it disorganized? Too long? Too short? –
The description was good and it instantly made me sad. I don’t like it when Kevin is sad. :(
The foreword was really good. It definitely caught my attention. Not too many people write a description/foreword correctly and is interesting enough.
Poster, Background, Trailer, Appearance: ( 4/5) – Is there too much going on? Too distracting? Does it blow me away? –
You made the poster? It’s really nice and it gives off that angsty feel as well, especially all of the happy pictures of Kevin and the clouds in the background. I suggest you add a space between the conversation and description/Kevin thoughts. It looks a bit jumble up.
Chapter titles: ( 5/5) – Did they have anything to do with the chapter? Or did you put random words up there? ** Chapter 1, Chapter 2, etc, do not count as chapter titles. –
I really like how the chapter title is the day we are on that Kevin has been in the hospital. I really like how you started us off on day 235 instead of starting from the beginning.
Spelling & Grammar: ( 35/35) – Do you have good knowledge of tenses and general, simple English rules? Or do you make the same mistakes over and over again? –
Amazing! I barely saw any. As a matter of fact, I don’t think I saw any!
Plot: ( 8/10) – Is it easy to follow? Or too complicated and weird? –
I can kind of tell where this story might go, but the events that have happened so far are very good.
Originality: ( 8/10) – Is this your own creation, or is it something that is used a billion times over? Did you make an overused plot your own, or did you follow a cookie cutter outline? –
This may be the third time I’ve ever read a story about the main character being in the hospital for being sick. I’m assuming Kevin has cancer or something similar?
Character Development: ( 8/10) – Too much, or too little? Can I recognize with your character's situation? Am I rooting for some, and wishing others would just die? –
You only have a few chapters done so far, so it’s a bit too early to see any character development, but I can clearly tell Kevin’s type of personality. Can I just tell you that I don’t like that nurse as well?
Flow: ( 10/10) – How's your pace? Too fast, too slow? Just right? –
Since so far each chapter is about each day he spends in the hospital, the flow is good.
Total Before Bonuses: ( 92/100)
BONUS!!! – Things that are just the reviewer's personal preference. –
Writing Style: ( 3/5) – Is it one that is beautiful, or just plain confusing? –
Your style is good.
Enjoyment: ( 5/5) – How much did I really enjoy the story? –
I did enjoy this. Just about any U-Kiss story I enjoy. I enjoyed it even more because Kevin is the main.
Anticipation: ( 5/5) – Did you leave me wanting to read on and on? Or was I counting down the chapters until I was done? Did I want to subscribe to see what happens next? –
Congrats! I subscribed! I really want to know what happens to Kevin in the end.
Total After Bonuses: ( 105/115)
Reviewed by: Kakurine039
** Author's Note. I'm pretty positive I've already posted this... But, the site has been down lately so if I did post it, it got taken down -__-; By the way, I love all you guys.
Okaybai.
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