Reviewer: tiffusan

The Title: The title isn't very captivating to potential readers. It seems a little bland and cliche. Also, from what I could see, your title and your description/story in general doesn't really match. The title should describe the story, but not give it away totally. (2.5 points)

The Plot: The plot, unfortunately, is something you could easily find in AFF. It's rather cliche and I wouldn't really want to read it as a potential reader. However, I'm sure many people who are looking for a typical romance/drama story would enjoy reading it. (5 points)

The Context: There isn't any descriptions of settings and characters and the majority of the story is just dialogue. This isn't something that you want in a story, so you should probably add some sort of description so the reader can visualize your story better. Also, there is no indication about which character is speaking. The indents and spacing are rather unusual too. (3 points) 

Character Development: Unfortunately, there isn't really any character development present in the story. Perhaps you should incorporate that in future chapters. (3.5 points) 

Plot Development: Like the above category, there isn't a sufficient amount of plot development either. Putting that in future chapters should make your story a little more well-written. (5 points) 

Overall: Kwangmin and Seyong aren't my biases, so this isn't a story I would read AS A READER. As a reviewer, however, I'd say that your story needs some improvements and changes. Hopefully, this review will somewhat help you become a better writer. ^^

Total Amount of Points: 19/50

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Just wanted to say that having low points doesn't necessarily mean you're a terrible writer and/or your story is terrible. Every writer has room for improvement. It's just that some need it more than others. Anyway, I hope my review will help you in improving your story. Thanks, again, for requesting! :) -tiffusan