silverline - FATE
come at me bro ♡ request shop oneAuthor: silverline
Story: FATE or Infinitely Yours
Title; [4/5]
Description; [9/10]
Graphics: [10/10] Overall, it's good. Just that maybe you could have picturesfor IU and Wooyoung.
Character Organizing; [10/10] Brothers, sisters; everything is organized well. Good work.
Plot; [9/10]
Flow; [10/10]
Style; [5/5]
Originality; [9/10] Well, foreingers entering another country and having these unknown 'friend' is awkwardly common.
Captivation; [8/10] There isn't much 'hook' or cliff-hanger to keep the reader going. Maybe you can leave some details out, and add then back at the end.
Grammar and Spelling; [6/10] If past-tenses are used, continue with it. Don't alternate between past-tenses and present-tenses.
Ending; [5/10] The ending doesn't make the reader continue reading for more information.
Total; [85/100]
Review by JJ (OnJong)
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