frenata - Years Later [oneshots]

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author; frenata

story; Years Later [oneshots]


Title; [4/5]

Description; [9/10]
Good to use quotes, but they have to connect to the stories.

Graphics; [7/10]
It’ll be good if wallpapers are used; most wallpapers are edited. The pictures connect to the story, and gives the reader a rough idea of the scene. Good job on that.

Plot; [6/10]
Well, to point out one; Chapter 3. How did it happen? You can extend the story by dropping hints about the start of their relationship; etc. For Chapter 1, why was Seunghyun crying? Any reason? A lot can be added to make the oneshots interesting, like writing the story based on a song by FTISLAND.

Flow; [8/10]
I can’t say much, really. Oneshots are meant to stand on its own. But I’ll say a lot of information and captivating details can be added.

Style; [4/5]
There’s always a cliff-hanger for each drabble. Moderate Korean is used for Chapter 1, but it’s acceptable; it strengthens the fact that they were actually communicating in Korean.

Originality; [10/10]
So far, I’ve never seen any of the storylines you’d used. Even Jaejin being weak, Seunghyun crying; it’s never been written amongst the umpteen fanfictions I’d read on the site. Good work.

Captivation; [9/10]
Overall enticing; but sometimes the power is cut off, usually by skipping crucial scenes. More details are usually complements of the story.

Grammar and Spelling; [7/10]
I’m trying to be lenient here, with understanding that English isn’t your first language. Choice of vocabulary is good, but grammar needs to be strengthened. Stick to past-tense throughout if you are using it, or present-perfect tenses if you will.

Ending; [7/10]
A low grade, I’ll say. Most of the oneshots end with many questions, probably because of insufficient time, I’d presume. The stories can be better if it’s lengthened, like a two-shot.


Total; [71/100]

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Ydolem99
#1
Graphic Forms ~
→ username: Ydolem99
→ name+link of story: BOYFRENEMIES + http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/833594/boyfrenemies-2ne1-bigbang-chaera-hyesun-ygfamily-namsong-ikon
→ summary of story: Taehyun hates Mino, and Mino hates Taehyun but all that changed
, after too much of a fight. The gay couples , who has, never dated yet, though they wanted to , have found , yet again, a total rival between them. To make Taehyun jealous, Mino used CL, Taehyun's old crush during their high school days. Taehyun didn't take the pleasure Mino has been having so probably used Mino's best friend , Bobby for himself.
→ what are you requesting? (poster, background, etc.) : Poster
→ theme: Angst / Romantic /
→ characters: Nam Taehyun , Song MinHo , CL , Bobby

→ character pics (HQ please) : http://s963.photobucket.com/user/Taehyun_San/library/REQUEST?sort=3&page=1

→ additional pictures: All is in the album :)
→ quotes/phrases: "I don't love you , you know"
→ designer you want: anyone :)
→ extra: Black and white if possible? please
GirlOnline123
#2
Graphic Forms ~
→ username: GirlOnline123 co-author= Angelgalanga123

→ name+link of story: My Boyfriend Mr Idol http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/918675/my-boyfriend-mr-idol-book-1-romance-exo-love

→ summary of story: Lay left Hana in search for fame, but when hana gets tickets to go to SEoul becaus eof her uncle, she finally gets to meet the EXO memebrs and her boyfriend. But what if she gets herself into a love triangle between her boyfriend and best friend?

→ what are you requesting? (poster, background, etc.) poster please

→ theme: romantic/sad

→ characters: Luhan, IU, Zhang Yixing, EXO

→ character pics (HQplease):
https://40.media.tumblr.com/e2eb85c51594471c987d0882b5a4c10c/tumblr_mx23kaDoTp1spwxymo1_r6_500.png
http://25.media.tumblr.com/214e489c4f8808a29d371439cb23488a/tumblr_mo8wb8xLCQ1r7xjbmo1_500.png
http://fc09.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2013/242/2/d/exo_luhan_wallpaper__1610_x_980__by_fruitydeer-d6kd1ot.png

→ additional pictures:
http://www.hdwallpapers.in/walls/beautiful_sky_white_flower-normal.jpg
https://encrypted-tbn1.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcQb-rkX5CTuW5OAiPY12C7KoRORhE9XBIQXiQCI4zl6lOB-9oNu
http://cdn01.wallconvert.com/_media/conv/1/21/208528-piano-keyboard.jpg

→ quotes/phrases: "If you ahve to choose between me and someone else, choose him, because if you really loved me, there wouldn't be a choice."

→ designer you want: dsiredream

→ extra: Do you do gif posters? If do please make mine a gif poster, thank you
benedicttegarcia
#3
Chapter 8: Can I ask you a question? Where can I edit a picture? Or can you make me a poster for my story?
Ai_Dami
#4
Hi! Applied for story editor position. ^^
apple-chii #5
totally supporting ♥
(ノ◕ヮ◕)ノ*:・゚✧
kyouyas
#6
→ username/authors: kpoplistener

→ name+link of story Aish! That Jung Daehyun! > http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/249776/aish-that-jung-daehyun-yongguk-zelo-jongup-bap-daehyun-youngjae-kimnamjoo

→ is it ? not

→ number of chapters: 22

→ is it completed? Uncomplete

→ is english your first language? Yes

→ link to main graphic (if you have one): http://i.imgur.com/Coa9H.gif

→ reviewer you want: anyone is fine

→ extra: Thank you so much in advance! Please focus on the grammar and the characterization :)
takemyhand
#7
ASDFGHJKL i'm so sorry i haven't seen the poster yet! D:
i was like, hmm... what happened to the poster?
and i went and it was finished OAO

it's really, really great, thank you! ouo
i like the colours so much xD green and blue are pretty. *^*
but. um. i think attached is misspelt in the poster..? o.o;
did i spell it wrong in my comment? OAO
i'm so sorry if i did, but could you please please please change the spelling? ouo;;
i know the shop's closed and all, but please? ouo;;;;