silverline - Infinitely Yours
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title; Infinitely Yours
reviewer: OnJong
Title; [3/5]
Description; [9 /10]
A detailed expression of the characters, although in Wooyoung's part, it's fiancé instead of fiancée.
Graphics: [8 /10]
The artwork is simple, and does not distract the readers when they read the passages. The background contradicts the storyline.
Character Organizing; [9 /10]
A detailed explanation in the description makes the story easy to digest, but there is space to explain further in the story.
Plot; [8 /10]
A basic choice of vocabulary allows the readers to understand the story better. Personally I feel that the situation between IU and Taecyeon is not clear enough.
Flow; [9 /10]
The tenses of the words make the story messy. Like the second sentence on Chapter 1, 'Memories rushed back to his mind' would be suitable. Or the incident between the taxi driver and Taecyeon, an identity card would be more appropriate. Or, when the taxi driver showed him the identity card, 'a look that told him...' would be less confusing.
Style; [4 /5]
Originality; [8 /10]
A basic yet nice story about a foreigner in a new country; quite rare in AFF, to be honest.
Captivation; [7 /10]
The grammar and choice of vocabulary distract the reader who is deeply intrigued in the story. What I mean is, the vocabulary is good, just that the sentences are not complete enough to make sense.
Ending; [9 /10]
A nice sequence of events before the chapter ends; it leaves the reader on suspense too. Although most attempts to create suspense falter under the plot of the story, this storyline leaves a distinct impression in the readers.
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