Its...Mighty Morphin Time!!

Chapter 3

Read Author's Note POV.

After hours and hours of reading magazines, Minho's head was starting to hurt.

It was overwhelming. So many different types of fashion. So many brands, soooo many looks. So many EVERYTHING. Minho didn't know where to start. Every trend was researched, every celebrity star googled, every popular song was youtube'd.

His hurting head didn't matter, though.

Because though more stressful than studying actual textbooks, Minho knew exactly what he wanted to portray with his new image from reading the magazines.

And for once, he was proud of himself, not for an A on an exam, but for getting closer to a new him, a new future with possibly, HER.

Flashback:

Elementary School: All the kids were gathered around the playground pointing and laughing at Minho who brought a book to read out at recess. To him, it was better to read than to associate with those booger-picking insults known as children. Especially when those children would stoop as low as possible to take time out of their playtime to make fun of people. Couldn't they mind their own business? They were probably just jealous that Minho could already read, when the best they could do was do flips on monkey bars. Though Minho knew better than to let these monkeys affect him, he let the tears escape his eyes when he saw SooYuri laughing along with them.

Middle School: Cell phone?!? Minho never needed a cell phone. Why did he have to get laughed at again for lacking a silly material object? Not only laughed at, but was tripped as well. That trip lead to blood-stained clothes. At the adminstrator's office, the bully explained it as an effort to show Minho that it was necessary to have a cell phone, being highly useful in "emergencies" that could occur, and he had nothing to use to call his parents for a change of clothes. The bully was excused, but Minho didn't believe in any type of crap like that. Though unaffected by the bully, it still hurt Minho when he realized the bully was SooYuri's boyfriend, and that she would fall for that type of guy.

High School: Minho was now made the bullies' object, played on everyday in all ways imaginable. It was okay though, knowing that he would later be the CEO of the company all these future janitors would be working at. He still, however could not accept the fact that the one girl that had a place in his heart aside from his family hardly knew him, and worse, supported the constant teasing in his life.

Minho shook off the sudden remembrance of not-so-good times during his life and proceeded with his transformation.

When Minho walked into his parents' house, his parents were shocked.

"Oemeona!! My son, your hair, you had it cut!!" His mom said.

"N-ne, Umma. Is it okay?" Minho asked.

Minho's mom rushed over to give him a big hug, with his dad in the background praising him with compliments of his good looks.

Minho ran off into his room, with slight embarrassment of the reaction his parents had given him, hearing sobs of "OH MY BABY HAS GROWN UP!!" in the background.

Minho looked at himself in the mirror, at his new "stylish" haircut, marveling at what a pair of scissors could do to get that type of reaction. He simply went up to the barber and told him to "make it work" and when he looked up from his magazine, his hair was transformed into a styled fauxhawk. Was this really what people considered "y"? Either way, Minho was going to keep it.

Throughout summer, Minho revamped his wardrobe with help from his mother. Who knew she had fashion sense? She had picked 20 new outfits for Minho to wear the day after Minho got his haircut, and by the end of summer could've built a small forever 21 with the amount of new clothes in Minho's closet. The first time Minho tried wearing an outfit, he received two phone numbers from girls and dirty glares from boys. "hehe, its kind of fun to be like this," he thought.

Not only did Minho change his appearance, but also did a little bit of "soul searching." He realized that life isn't all about studies, and found music to be one of his passions. He listened to many KPOP artists, such as DBSK, Rain, and Boa, and even took summer English courses to sing along and rap with Michael Jackson, the Beatles, and Eminem.

By the end of summer, Minho had blossomed into a Charismatic Charmer of a boy, and knowing that, he marched into the new school year with an undeniable new of confidence.

A/N: Hello, Hello! I have sooo much to say.

Gah. First of all, as you can tell, this is in a different point of view. Its an omniscient one, and I think I like it this way rather than switching every paragraph.. I was working on this being longer, but its not. :P \What'd you guys think of this one? Hope its okay.

PSS. I kept seeing him like this in my mind.

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Rini6189 #1 Dec 28, 2016 04:01:13

Chapter 10: That's understandable when you no longer have the drive to continue this story. It's normal for people to go through a phrase where they outgrow something. At least getting into K-Pop and fanfics is a good opportunity for you to do some exploring in the learning process. Having Ruki be there as support and guidance during that phase is a blessing for you to expand on your writing skill and broaden your horizon.

I haven't been on AFF for a long time when my interest drifted elsewhere and real life takes over to occupy my time. Now I'm dropping by to visit this site since I've missed it after a long absence. Through, there at come a time where I'd drift away from AFF and return later depending on where the feeling takes me.

If you do come back with new material to share with your readers and subscribers, it'll be something to look forward to. ..especially to see your growth as a writer.

Rini6189 #2 Feb 25, 2011 05:29:45

You're welcome! I'm glad to be of help, especially in giving constructive criticism when necessary. Since you mentioned in your author's note about accepting criticism that teaches you how to improve, I went all-out in my commenting. I don't have a problem with leaving comments since I'm openly expressive. 
 
Well, at least we get to understand Minho's character a little more better now. It's good that he hasn't completely changed after going through that transformation (just appearance-wise). He's still the same Minho inside but this time with a different life perspective and self-confidence. xD The so-called miracle of hormones causes confusion even among the brightest of minds regarding the matters of the heart. After all this time, the flame that he has for Yuri still hasn't died out. Being torn between the two girls must be troublesome for his male mind to take in. Then again, this could be just "a phase" like he said. Staying true to his heart can help him figure out the confusion. (Are you familiar with the song, "True To Your Heart?" That about explains it.) Rising to fame will be a challenging with plenty of obstacles along the way. The sentence in the end of this chapter makes him sound like the Minho we know in real life with a competitive streak. Now I'm anticipating Yuri and Yuna's encounter after they haven't spoken for a long time and the audition as well.

Rini6189 #3 Feb 25, 2011 04:47:05

I just couldn't help but spot these mistakes/typos because of my sharp eyes. 
 
Chapter 8 mistakes: 
 
1. I couldn’t help but to stare at her and her dramatic fashion sense at everyone chance I could, and she--she didn’t even say a word after that. 
* It's "every one chance." 
 
2. If anyone were to help her, the best they could do is burst her bubble--get her out of the trap that every thing's fine. 
* It's "anyone was" and the other is "everything's fine." Since "everything" is another subject in this sentence, it's written as one word combined together. 
 
3. But within a heavier note, I took a gander at the hallways, with busy body students traveling to their homeroom, and then found out, she was here today. 
* It's supposed to be "she is here" because the adverb "here" indicates present tense. 
 
4. Sh scoffed. 
* "She" (I understand this mistake could've been made from typing fast.) 
 
5. Jiyoung, on the other hand is a straight up play boy. 
Correction: Jiyoung, on the other hand, is a straight-up playboy. 
 
6. Jiyoung slipped me an invite, which was in a black envelope with sticker of an apple on the flap and on the back, engraved in gold were the worlds “YOU’RE INVITED” in that little annoying capital letter font that literally stabs my eyes. 
Correction: Jiyoung slipped me an invite, which was in a black envelope with a sticker of an apple on the flap; and on the back, engraved in gold, were the words “YOU’RE INVITED” in that little annoying capital letter font that literally stabs my eyes. 
* Comma splicing 
 
7. But then again, this also says I had some hometown competition... 
* It's "I have" since this sentence is written in present tense. 
 
8. After more disrespectful jokes and erse laughter, the bell rung and it was time to disperse. 
* Past tense is "rang." 
 
9. Just you wait, SM Choi Minho is coming to you guys soon. 
Correction: Just you wait, SM, Choi Minho is coming to you guys soon. 
* An extra comma is needed there since SM isn't a part of Minho's name.

Emperor_Kyungsoo #4 Feb 24, 2011 14:52:21

Soooo daebak! 8D I'm only on chapter 5, but... im like... drawn in. 8D

crazyfreakygirly #5 Feb 24, 2011 02:13:18

Ooohhh supa dupa interesting! 
More updates please guys? ;D 
<3

wendyfrost #6 Feb 23, 2011 23:01:37

THANKS FOR THE UPDATE YAYYYYYYYYYYY

Rini6189 #7 Feb 23, 2011 04:44:39

After seeing the title of this fic, it made me interested in finding out what the storyline will be about. I didn't expect to be so drawn into this story once I started reading it. The detailed descriptions help me clearly visualize in my mind about what's going on in the story. I like how in-depth you delve into the characters' thoughts and emotions. The angst is captured pretty well. Everything seems to be portrayed realistically. xD I couldn't help but think of Power Rangers when I see the title of the third chapter. Yuna's nickname for Minho is weird. After the tables have her, Yuri seems to have realized and begun to understand some things that weren't obvious to her before when she was still a "queenka." Change is what gets the two main characters, Yuri and Minho, to have a different outlook on life than the one they used to live by. It could be a good thing to build character. Minho seems to care for Yuri even though she didn't treat him fairly or take notice of him before. He's like the only hope she has left of thriving and forming a good potential friendship. I wonder if Yuna actually does miss Yuri after all that's happened even though Yuri seemed to have cut off ties with her after receiving a lecture from Yuna about taking the change as an opportunity to look at life differently. She seems hesitant in her speech as though she doesn't mean what she says. It couldn't be helped that time because Yuri was emotionally unstable from finding out that her parents had gone from her life forever. Still, a best friend can learn to forgive the other for his/her shortcomings. 
 
I'm glad to have clicked onto this story's link. ^^ Now I'm looking forward to reading more.

Rini6189 #8 Feb 23, 2011 03:57:58

Chapter 7 mistakes (Part 2): 
 
6. In order to keep herself still sane, she yanked chords from her home phone in her room and took the battery out of her phone and flung it at the wall. 
* It should be "cords" instead of the "chords" that refers to music. 
 
7. Trapped in her room for four days missing school calls for some time alone. 
Correction: She was trapped in her room for four days missing school calls for some time alone. 
* A subject is missing at the beginning of this sentence. 
 
8. So that empty time was accompanied by reflection of her only companion, Minho. 
* The word "so" at the beginning of this sentence makes it a fragment (a dependent clause), and it should be excluded to make this a complete sentence. 
 
9. And thinking of which stimulated her brain to start feeling remorseful. 
Correction: Thinking of that stimulated her brain to start feeling remorseful. 
* This looks like another sentence fragment beginning with a conjunction like "and." 
 
10. Now, she thought, I have gone through the punishment and experienced some of the after-math. 
* "Aftermath" is one word alone without a hyphen. 
 
11. It was then, when she had turned around, their eyes met. 
Correction: It was then, when she had turned around, that their eyes met.

Rini6189 #9 Feb 23, 2011 03:57:08

Chapter 7 mistakes: 
 
1. Joon and Yuri, or JuRi were the hottest couple on the campus. 
* An extra comma is needed after "JuRi" to separate it from the rest of the phrase since it serves as an interruption. 
 
2. But Joon had commited such a horrible action, and with lots of pleading and begging, Yuri kindly took him back into her life as a close friend. 
Correction: Though, Joon had commited such a horrible action. With lots of pleading and begging, Yuri kindly took him back into her life as a close friend. 
* It's like a run-on with everything clumped together like that since the phrases refer to different subjects. 
 
3. She thought Joon would be as thrilled to talk to her as she would him, but it turned out onto the contrary side. 
Correction: She thought Joon would be as thrilled to talk to her as she would to him, but it turned out on the contrary. 
 
4. “She’s a ,” HyunSung said before jugging down a bottle of soju.” 
Correction: “She's a ,” HyunSung said before chugging down a bottle of soju. 
 
5. After several more calls similar to the ones before, Sooyuri was on the vierge of tears. 
* It's spelled "verge."

Rini6189 #10 Feb 23, 2011 03:24:48

Chapter 6 mistakes: 
 
1. The confusion and dismay swimming in his mind was too much, it practically drowned his brain of thinking thoughts of only his trophy wife and how she had been demoted to Lady of the Trash. 
* Instead of putting the comma there to separate the two phrases, they could've been written as two separate sentences because it seems like a run-on here. 
 
2. “Still think I’m hot, huh? Well, I’m glad your not tripping over me this time,” said Yuri with diva-like confidence. 
* It's "you're" instead of the possessive adjective "your." 
 
3. "Yeah." He answered this question with hesitation, not daring to look into Yuri’s eyes; he was afraid if he had, he would give it away. 
Correction: "Yeah," he answered this question with hesitation, not daring to look into Yuri’s eyes. He was afraid that if he had, he would give it away. 
 
4. “Waay prettier than you are” were words almost sliding out of Minho’s mouth, but biting his lip cautiously, he replied calmly, “Uh, I guess, but let me take my side of the questions.” 
Correction: “Waay prettier than you are” were the words almost sliding out of Minho’s mouth. Biting his lip cautiously, he replied calmly, “Uh, I guess, but let me take my side of the questions.” 
 
5. He didn’t want to jinx himself of being apart of the SM family, so he kept it low key, using his lie of working at a mall as his cover up. 
Correction: He didn’t want to jinx himself of being a part of the SM family, so he kept it low key by using his lie of working at a mall as his cover-up. 
 
6. Minho grasped her hand firmly, causing Yuri to yelped in pain. 
* It should be in its stem form "yelp" since the preposition "to" is inserted before the verb to indicate the action. 
 
7. I’m sure you’ll do fine though! 
* A comma is needed before the adverb "though." 
 
8. We’ve only known each other for four days and your calling me names! 
* It's "you're."