Chapter 04

When The Sun Falls

A/N: please reread the last few updates! I did some editing and swapped some chapters c:

 

 

They continue down the forest trail at a lazy walk, loose reins and a slow gait to let the horses rest after their little race. The riders catch their breaths and their laughter echoes around them, all tired smiles and adrenaline.

The little bits of sky visible through the treetops are now fading to black as night falls over the country. The men dismount, though Sanghyuk lets her stay in the saddle for her safety. ("You could trip. Better me than you, anyway. Eun will take good care of you,")

Crickets chirp in the grasses, their path illuminated by the moonlight and it's not long before Wonshik suggests they set up camp. They move to a riverbank sheltered by tall oaks and turn the horses loose to graze.

She's managed to coax a fire from dried wood with the help of Sanghyuk, the two having found flint stones along the river. The fire crackles and she pulls her cloak tighter around herself, warm and content and a little bit sleepy.

Sanghyuk is nestled beside her, still a bit buzzed and palms clasped together. Wonshik and Hongbin sit across from them and warm their own hands, occasionally looking back to check on the horses.

"We can bring you back home tomorrow," Wonshik smiles, "I think we know the way from here, I recognized some landmarks. Thank you for coming along with us,"

She nods politely, "it was no trouble,"

He gets to his feet and brushes off his trousers.

"I'm going to try and find some rabbits for breakfast tomorrow," he says and unsheathes a blade an inch thick and as long as her forearm hidden within the seams of his clothes. The metal flashes dangerously in the firelight and she feels her eyes widen.

"Hongbin, want to come? Another pair of eyes makes a big difference with those quick ers,"

Hongbin stands as well and flashes a dimpled smile and nods and the two disappear into the trees, bantering back and forth about something too quiet for her ears. Next to her, Sanghyuk tenses and she glances at him with a worried look.

"Are you alright?" she murmurs and places a comforting hand on his shoulder, "you seem on edge,"

Sanghyuk remains silent and there's a crease between his brows. Flames dance across his eyes as he sits unmoving, his face thrown into shadow and she's worried that she can't fully read his body language. He turns to her suddenly, gaze fever bright and very much serious, warm hands enveloping hers and she feels her pulse stutter at how close he is.

"You need to run," he whispers, his breath almost touching her lips. The cogs in her brain turn furiously and she frowns, completely and utterly confused at his torn expression.

"What?"

"The Queen is after you, Snow White."

She draws back slightly and searches his face, the way his lips are parted with each nervous breath. Her heart rate starts hammering for another reason entirely.

"How do you know who I am?" she inquires softly, the name everyone called her in the village the last thing she expected to hear from Sanghyuk.

She shakes her head and a sound of panic bubbles from , muttering to herself.

"What does Queen Valaine even want from me? I...I-I've never even been to the castle in my life.."

Sanghyuk shifts closer and urgently squeezes her hands as if to shift her attention to more pressing matters. His words spill quickly, his eyes darting back to where Hongbin and Wonshik had disappeared only minutes ago.

"The Queen is a vain and jealous woman who will do anything to get what she wants. She sent my brothers and I here to take your life. This was all a trap,"

Wonshik's knife flashes in her mind's eye and everything clicks together. Asking for directions, getting her here alone, and how isolated they were from civilization, miles from the next town. It was all part of a scheme.

She stands and he doesn't stop her, only gets to his feet as well and sensing her alarm, moves back a few steps. He raises his hands to show that he's unarmed.

"But I will do no such thing," he states and his voice breaks. Sanghyuk's features are etched with pain as she staggers backwards. His eyes glisten and he looks like he wants to take her in his arms again but just stands there in surrender, his chin tilting to the side to glance cautiously over his shoulder, "but I can't say the same for my brothers. That's why I needed to warn you,"

As if on cue, voices and the sound of movement through the underbrush causes both of them to freeze. Sanghyuk moves and braces her by the shoulders, voice low and quivering.

"Listen to me, Snow White. They're coming back and I won't be able to hold them off. My brothers are much stronger than I am,"

Each word is accented with another step from behind him and she whimpers.

"You're going to have to run now, as fast as you can, do you understand me? Don't stop no matter what happens. You're a smart girl, I know you'll be able to stay out of sight."

She's shaking now as the voices come closer, "I wish we could have met under different circumstances," he murmurs, "I'm so sorry it had to be like this." The look in his eyes is desperate and conflicted and she nods vigorously.

He makes a choked sound and takes her hands again, surprised when warm lips brush her forehead.

"May we meet again one day," Sanghyuk breathes with that sunshine smile and squeezes her hands. It's short lived as the mask of hurt settles over his face and he gently pushes her away.

"Go," he says.

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byuntaeken
#1
Chapter 13: aesthetical, heart-shattering, enchated, and indeed...more than just a fairytale.

i cried once again and fell in love with this pure and grand story. author-nim ily sm. reading it gave me a delightful and a rousing feeling. idk it was beautifully odd and well-settled. although it broke me. it was wonderful. its like u originally created SNOW WHITE mehehehhh. tbh this is my favored fic among all fairytale genres. this is legit.

i had sm to say but i think i need some time to cry MEHEHEHHHH
Amalya
#2
Chapter 13: Well this ended up being an interesting twist indeed. No actual showdown/conflict; no dwarves or small men (like the Disney version); and the added element of spirits and good sorcerers, but you still included some of the key points that make the story Snow White in its core. Well done with those changes and such. I like the realism of the heart pulled in different directions, and you twist the knife with the last chapter there, giving her one happy ending, but perhaps not the one she would have preferred.

I still have no sense of what Snow White actually looks like though. Other than beautiful. And I wasn't able to figure out why you used italics at some points but not at others. They felt rather random and actually confused me with the ambiguity of their purpose. *shrug* Other than that, I like how the brothers were essentially the huntsman and how Wonshik's apparent blood-thirst wasn't quite what it seemed at the surface. Despite the ending, your story very much does read like a fairy tale with things happening in such a way that the reader just has to accept that some things are the way they are or happen the way they do, but it's not a bad thing.

I found the ending to be bittersweetly abrupt and I am currently wishing for more resolution with the Queen, considering they're related (that was another thing that felt odd in the beginning), but overall, it's a good retelling of the tale. Nicely done and congrats for finishing it. Good luck with it in the other contest you've entered it into. ^_^
Amalya
#3
Chapter 4: Okay. So now the first few chapters make sense. I was absolutely confounded by how everything was playing out with the three brothers but this definitely ties all those questions together in a neat, but far darker answer than I would have hoped for. haha Go Sanghyuk for not being a cold-hearted... villain? I wouldn't exactly call the brothers that, since they are following orders but still. -_- Definitely off to an interesting start. Some of the italics in the previous chapters were a bit confusing since I wasn't sure who was speaking or who the speaker was talking to/about, but in general, the story is moving very much like a fairy tale. There's just enough description to make it clear and it has the somewhat lighthearted tone of the beginnings of a fairy tale itself. I still don't have much of a sense for Snow White herself - I get impressions from everyone around her but she's otherwise an amorphous 'beauty' as it were, but I'm hoping time will tell!

I did rather like that encounter with her and the Viscount in the beginning. Nice touch and a good way to approach a sometimes sensitive/uncomfortable topic. She handled it quite nicely, though I do wonder if that's the last we'll see of him. Anyway, onward to more to see what happens. I'm rather a fan of the original tale so I'm curious to know how you've twisted it. ^_^
rumourhasit12
#4
Chapter 13: ... Jaehwan <////////3
minyoungunnie #5
Chapter 13: My feelssss
Love this!
nemosmknimh
#6
Fairytales are usually happy.... but still i prefer yours....
It is full of emotion.... much better than usual Fairytales.
This is a well written tale. I love it
StarlightHeaven
#7
Chapter 13: Authornim you are the best..this story make me sad and broken. i just can't handle this feeling and it such a beautiful wonderful writing
Ever_Lasting_Friend
#8
Chapter 13: This was simply beautiful to read. At the last chapter I hit Previous thinking there was another chapter and then I got sad that it was over. I think I seriously need a sequel, because this was one of the best fairy tale stories I've read in a really long time. Really amazing writing!!
Andreacnushin
#9
ㅋㅋㅋㅋ This reminds me of my struggle with my two main biases in Vixx. I like Leo the most but Ken is always trying to creep up on him. I like the way you described their singing voices and their personalities. Great chapter!
Andreacnushin
#10
Chapter 7: This is really cute and interesting to read. I love reworked fairy tales and this is better than most I have read. I'm glad all the members of Vixx have been mentioned, except for Leo but I'm hoping he's the prince ;) You have a good idea going here, I hope you continue!