Unstoppable Marriage

Story By: aznphoenix

Reviewed By: StarlightTango and drakeissocoolxx

Title: _/10

StarlightTango: 5/10

I didn't find the title to be very good. It seemed cliche and it didn't catch my eye. It seemed too simple and I felt like you didn't put much thought into it. From your title I already could tell what type of story this was going to be like. You kind of gave away the plot. But that's not a bad thing. It's nice to know what you're going to read about, and I just dont think this was my type of story.

drakeissocoolxx: _/10

Description/Foreword: _/15

StarlightTango: 13/15

Your description was pretty good. I liked how you told us your story without revealing too much! It was just perfect. You included the main characters but you did it in such a unique way. I liked the quotes as if they are saying them. We could really get a sense of what the story is going to be about. The only reason I took off some points was because it wasn't that entertaining. It didn't make me want to click and read on your story. That is quite a problem don't you think?

drakeissocoolxx: _/15

Appearance: _/5

StarlightTango: 4/5

Overall things were good. You had a decent font/font size/font color and everything looked good. But I just didn't like how at every chapter you would use a different picture. It made you story seem less professional and more all over the place as if you didn't know what to do.

drakeissocoolxx: _/5

Characterization: _/15

StarlightTango: 13/15

I seriously enjoyed reading this story because of your characters! They were perfect and very funny. They always had my laughing and I felt like you wrote them well. Taeyeon was just a tad bit different than what I thought she would be like, but I guess this is what makes your story more enjoyable. I also found myself being able to stand Jessica here. Normally im not a big fan of her, but here she seemed much better. I also liked Seohyun here. She seemed just like herself besides the slightly cunning side of her.

drakeissocoolxx: _/15

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary: _/30

StarlightTango: 28/30

I think that your grammar is quite good. As I read your story I didn't really notice any mistakes. If there were any they were really small and not really worth noticing. Your spelling also, it was good. The reason I took off some points were becuase I thought that you could have used better words. Your vocabulary seemed to be ok. It's not that bad, but I would have liked it if you sentences were more complex. You have the skills to do it so why not?

drakeissocoolxx: _/30

Originality/Creativity: _/10

StarlightTango: 9/10

I would say that your creativity is off the charts! I enjoyed reading every little thing that came up, and the plot was also entertaining. The originality was kind of low though. There are many stories out there like this, but I liked how you added your own style to it.

drakeissocoolxx: _/10

Plot Content/Flow: _/15

StarlightTango: 13/15

I liked how your story was filled with lots of action. The plot content was always there, and I never got bored. You wrote a lot and that's a good thing! I kind of felt like your flow was just a bit too fast though. I would have liked it if you would describe things a little more. Give more details so the readers can understand it better.

drakeissocoolxx: _/15

Total: _/100

StarlightTango: 85/100

drakeissocoolxx: _/100