Mr. & Mrs. Choi

Story By: QueenYG_

Reviewed By: StarlightTango

Title [Is your title eye catching? Does it match your story? How well does it attract readers]: 9/10

Such a good title. It was eye catching, and impressive. I liked how it stirred an emotion in me...its hard to explain. Funny how when I was reviewing this story I happened to be listening to a 2NE1 album and Park Bom's You and I was playing! Then I listened to  a BIG BANG one right after! The title made perfect sense and matched your story well. I liked how it revealed a little bit of the plot, but not a lot of it.

Description/Foreword [Are you properly describing your story? Is it too much, or too little? Does it give away just enough of the plot to make readers interested?]: 12/15

I found your description to be good. It describes your story, but didn't give too much of the plot away. I just took off a few points because it wasn't all that entertaining. Also "Read the dramatic story of Mr. & Mrs. Choi, adapted from American movie, Mr. and Mrs. Smith" should have a 'the' between 'from' and 'American'. Adapted from the American move.

Your foreword was brilliant! I found myself smiling when I read it. You did such a good job writing it. I could already tell that I would enjoy the way you write!

Appearance [Does the poster and background match the story? Is the font a good choice? Did you use colors that appeal to the eye?]: 5/5

Poster was amazing. It fit the theme perfectly, and I liked the font that you used. The size was also nice, and it was easy to read.

Characterization [How well do your characters progress in the story? Do we understand your characters, and do they seem realistic? Are they believable, and can the readers connect with them?] : 15/15

You are absolutely a pro at this. I found myself loving both Bom and TOP. I also liked how you managed to create them in a new way, and make them seem human. You also slowly changed them to love each other. That is skill. I found that...well I found everything just...just...well....wow.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [Did you spell anything wrong? Is there any grammar mistakes? Are you constantly using the same words over and over again? How well are you describing your story]: 29/30

Your grammar is really good. There is nothing wrong that I can point out. Your spelling is also fine. There were just some tiny errors that were probably a typo. For example on chapter 10 the last sentence says "I don't need a anyone" when it should just be "I don't need anyone". Your vocabulary was ok. I didn't think it was anything impressive, but it wasn't bad either. You write so well why not try to add some better words? Don't constantly use the same words over and over again.

Originality/Creativity [How different is your story from others? Is it creative, and does it interest the readers]: 8/10

Well the story isn't all that original but since plots have been used over and over a lot on aff you really have a completely new plot. I do like the idea of this though. It made a feel a crazy amount of emotions. Sadness, happiness, craziness. Your creativity is way over the top(hahaha get it?...wow that was some stupid lame joke ._.) I found myself enjoying the scenes when they are trying to kill each other. So adorable!

Plot Content/Flow [Is the story too fast? Too slow? What exactly are you writing about in your story? Are all your chapters fillers, or does it have an actual plot line]: 13/15

The plot content is amazing. I enjoyed everything that happened, and you wrote it in such a way that always made me read more. I never seemed to get bored! Since this is such a great story I would have liked it if you wrote more. The flow is just a tad too fast. Try making your chapters longer. Use some descriptive words, and explain everything(especially the scenes where they fight) so the readers can understand the story better.

Total: 91/100

Grade: A