GUTS

Story By: BeautifulMess

Reviewed By: StarlightTango

Title [Is your title eye catching? Does it match your story? How well does it attract readers]: 6/10

I have nothing against your title, but I have no reason to really like it either. It was a one word title, so it has to grab the reader's attention. I think you did that fairly well. But is it really necessary to have it in all caps? When you did that it kind of was a turn off for me. It seemed like you were trying too hard, and you needed it to say 'look at me'.

If I were to rank the title based on originality and how much it appealed to me I would say you would get a 80% out of 100%. This kind of title made me think that the story was angsty. But a good thing is that you didn't reveal the plot through your title. It made me wonder and question what the story was going to be about.

Description/Foreword [Are you properly describing your story? Is it too much, or too little? Does it give away just enough of the plot to make readers interested?]: 12/15

I feel like you showed us too much plot. We already know what's going to happen and might not even want to read the story. It's important to give the readers a taste of your story, but you don't have to give away all of it. What's the fun of reading a story when you already what it's going to be about? I did like the trailer though. It was perfect and fit the theme well! Your foreword was really good. I was impressed with your writing skills, and it really made me want to read more.

Appearance [Does the poster and background match the story? Is the font a good choice? Did you use colors that appeal to the eye?]: 5/5

The poster is so beautiful! The colors, theme, ect everything was nice! You also chose a good font and font size. You also didn't go crazy with the colors!

Characterization [How well do your characters progress in the story? Do we understand your characters, and do they seem realistic? Are they believable, and can the readers connect with them?] : 13/15

You did really well here. I could understand your characters and I liked them a lot. The main OC isn't clinging, and cliche. She's the exact type of character that I would like to see in a story. EXO was also well portrayed. Though at times I wonder how my lovely nice Baekhyun could act the way he did, but it was kind of attractive and new. You don't want the same old boring type of characters right?

If I were to suggest something that would be to not forget some characters. In the beginning you did a good job of writing about every character but as the story progressed I started to see less and less of some. Also the night crawlers are some creepy stuff. I loved how you wrote about them.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [Did you spell anything wrong? Is there any grammar mistakes? Are you constantly using the same words over and over again? How well are you describing your story]: 29/30

I found no grammar mistakes. You write really well. But I suggest you try using some bigger words. You have the skill so why not? Keep a thesaurus with you, that might help.

Originality/Creativity [How different is your story from others? Is it creative, and does it interest the readers]: 10/10

This was brilliant! No words can describe how much I liked the story. It was creative and original. I loved how you managed to incorporate romance, comedy, action, supernatural.

Plot Content/Flow [Is the story too fast? Too slow? What exactly are you writing about in your story? Are all your chapters fillers, or does it have an actual plot line]: 14/15

I felt like the plot content was perfect. You added lots of things that kept your readers entertained. I liked that a lot. The flow was ok. Since your trying to capture so much stuff in your story I would have liked more detail. So slow down the pace of the story just a bit. The idea is great, and I would be even better if you could write more about it.

Total: 84/100