Title (3/5):

Your title wasn't all that great. Its not something that wows the readers, but I must say it is thought provoking. The movie is over? I wonder how it connects to your story, so please do make sure to explain it in your following chapters. Other than that I also want to give you credit for thinking of a pretty unique title. Its not often that you see a story titled this.

Description + Foreword (8/10) :

First of all there were some errors in your description. The description is a very very very very important place. Never ever ever put anything else besides what describes your story in there. You put like an author's note? Saying stuff like the title will make sense later ect. Dont. Ever. Do. That. Ok? :D Put it in the foreword! Next thing...your description doesn't have to be italicized. It just seemed weird. But good job for making me curious about your story! It was written quite well that it makes people want to read your story! Your foreword was really quite good! Once again it make me interested...hehehe or im just being biased cause I LOVE CHUNJI! Anyways...good job!

Background + Poster  (__/10):

J!! Your going to fill this in right?^^ mkay oppa!

Originality  (11/15):

This is probably one of the most slightly kind of cliche plots. Its overused because there is jealousy, and Chunji didnt know that he liked L.Joe ect. But the way you wrote it made it seem new. Fresh.

Plot/flow of the story  (17/20):

I thought that you were going just a little too fast. In five chapters a lot happened. It would have been better if you had explained things more so that the readers can understand things better. But it wasnt that bad.

Characterization  (8/10):

Wow...i really liked your characters! They seemed really believable, and i enjoyed reading about them. Sometimes L.Joe and Changjo are too crazy, but i dont care. Also Chunji crying? Aww! I really liked how your portrayed the!

Grammar/Spelling  (16/20):

Overall your grammar was quite good. But of course no one is perfect, and there are some mistakes. Here we go!

OR: I learnt he has a great sense of humour(chapter1)

CR: I learned that he has a great sense of humor

OR: When we woke up for schedules the next morning Byunghyun was normal, placid self(chapter1)

CR: When we woke up for our schedules the next morning Byunghyun was his normal, placid self

OR: I walk away and hear Daniel being singing 2PM's "I'll Be Back"

CR: I walk away and hear Daniel singing 2PM's "I'll Be Back"

Writing Style  (10/15):

I liked the way you write. It was easy to understand and easy to follow. But your writing also wasnt anything impressive. You repeated words a lot, so maybe try using a thesaurus?  

Overall enjoyment (18/20):

I really enjoyed this story! Its actually really good. I just loved the whole concept of it, and I truly had fun reading this.

Extras (4/5):

I love Chunjoe^^ They are so cute! One of my favorite pairings!

Total (85/130):