Doll Eye

Story By: puffy73

Reviewed By: StarlightTango

 

Title: 5/5

Wow...so bone-chilling with just TWO words. I seriously love this title! It fits well, and makes me want to read this so badly! Good choice of a title.

 

Description/Foreword: 12/15

Oh dang, i felt shivers when i read your description/foreword! It was done fairly well. I just thought that it lacked something. Something that would make it even more dramatic. It lacked the umpf for me to continue reading. But i did like how you revealed the plot, without over doing it. It told us what we needed to know, but also make us curious as to what would be happening next.

 

Appearance: 3/5

The poster was too big, but that's my thought. Also a black background or a darker one would have made it more dramatic than the white. The pictures were nice, and fit the theme well though!

 

Characterization: 12/15

I liked your characters! They seemed different, and i liked how you portrayed them. The only reason why i took off a few points was because i didn't feel as if i connected with the characters. But they really did make me think. I liked Miyoung because she was different than your normal OC. She also fit with the whole theme of this story.

 

Writing Style/Format: 9/10

I like how you write. It's easy to read and interesting! But try to keep the font and font size the same for every chapter. It kind of changed a bit. Also im glad you didn't go crazy with font and font color.

 

Grammar/Spelling: 24/25

You had really good English! I didn't find any major mistakes. But you did have a habit of overusing commas. That's not a big deal though. You had no spelling errors, from what i could tell at least. It was easy for me to read because i didn't have to wonder what you were trying to tell me. Your grammar was really...wow.

 

Originality/Creativity: 9/10

Wow talk about original! It was so new, so fresh and i was really having a fun time reading this story! Amazing! Creepy dolls are the best!

 

Plot/Flow: 14/15

I can not find any place where i could have written this better. The flow was done nicely. Not too fast, but not too slow to bore the readers. The plot was also interesting! I was getting happy because i could not expect what would happen next. The plot is so full of stuff!

 

Total: 87/100

 

Bonus: 5/5

One of the best stories i have ever read! I subscribed and can't wait for your next update!

 

New total: 92/100