Caged Hopes

Story By: -insidious

Reviewed By: StarlightTango

 

Title: 5/5

I really liked your title for some reason. I felt like the reader could connect with it easily, and it fit perfectly with your story. I also liked how you had 'caged' but then added 'hopes'. Normally they wouldn't go together, but when they do it sounds interesting. Definitely caught my eye, and i would have clicked on it if i wasn't revewing this.

 

Description/Foreword: 12/15

Your description was very well written. Sometimes i thought a sentence didn't make sense, but i re-read it and later it did. It happened again, and again. But that's not important. Anyways, it did describe the story to your reader, which is nice. You might have wrote too much of the plot though. Even though you did, I thought that it was ok, and didn't take off many points. The foreword was just beautiful! It's so inspirational, and i must say it made me think.

 

Appearance: 5/5

I seriously love the poster, and background! The colors worked well with the story, and i love the designer! She's amazing...anyways you chose a good font and size to write with. Thank god you didn't go crazy with the color also!

 

Characterization: 18/20

Even though you didn't describe him much, i felt as if i kind of understood him. You wrote Daehyun so beautifully, and he was very inspirational. But there were still times that i didn't quite figure him out. This is a one-shot though, so i shouldn't be picky about characterization.

 

Writing Style/Format: 9/10

Wow, your amazing. I could feel the emotions flooding the page. It affected me, and as a reader this is a good thing that your writing can motivate people. It was also easy for me to read, and understand this story.

 

Grammar/Spelling: 20/20

The previous reviewers did a good job, for i could not find any mistakes.

 

Originality/Creativity: 7/10

There are many stories that contain similar plots. Some with more angst, and some with more romance. But this stood out to me. It was the same, but different than others. Also, i'm happy that he survived.

 

Plot/Flow: 11/15

I liked this idea. There are many stories where people wanted to die and give up, but the hurricane was a nice twist. The pace of this was nicely done, until the end. I felt that it was rushed, and was done too quickly. It was a little choppy in the last half of the story, but the first half was done well.

 

Total: 87/100

 

Bonus: 3/5

This was such a good story! An amazing job for a one-shot. I really enjoyed reading this...thanks for giving me the opportunity to review this^^

 

New Total: 90/100