Title- 4/5

Your title is about as eye-catching as a two word title can get. I was genuinely curious for this story because "Post-It" could  mean so many things. Would I click it? Yes, I would. I would spend a minute or two contemplating because of the title, but I would click it nonetheless. 

Poster/Background. 0/5

None yet. 

Forward/ Description- 5/5

I was drawn in after the first line. “I’ve been talking to a complete stranger. Is that weird?” I tried to  do this once, but it didn’t work out. Anyways, back to the review. Your description was actually very good. It did your story justice. The only thing I would suggest would be for you to include the character descriptions/pictures after your prologue. It looks a bit awkward when you have a slight description, separation, then a prologue. 

Plot: 27/30

Your plot was really original and fun. Just like one of the characters said, something that would only happen in a drama. There were, however, a few holes in your plot. For example, I was pretty lost in the time frame. You only specified time between big events, never just everyday things. I was confused to whether these were happening day after day, so naturally I assumed it was day after day. However,  in a chapter, it said it was a week apart? You should specify this by saying, “the day after” or refer to an event as “yesterday”, give certain hits about the time frame.

Also, for a few chapters, there was a gap between your main plot. “Banana Milk” was absent for a few chapters, only until the birthday note. I was extremely confused by this. I would have preferred if there was an exchange that backtracked that. 

One last thing, some of the details don't really fit. The example I'm thinking of is the classes being canceled in High School. I don't really know how Korean schools work, but all the High Schools I know of never cancel one class without canceling all of the other ones. If they had a free period, as I understand high schools in some places have, I would find it more believable. 

Writing Style 9/10

Your style of writing goes perfectly with the light feel of this story. Jihye’s overreactions and all around narration of the story makes every situation she’s in really light and just.. well.. cute. I would be interested to see how the style changes in more serious events.  

The reason a point was deducted was because the use of Korean vocabulary. To most people, it would be confusing to keep track of Korean vocabulary that isn't used extremely often, and isn't as recognizable. I would suggest you keep the Korean vocabulary, but have a vocabulary section before you begin your chapter, explaining what some of these terms mean. 

Flow 13/15

Again, confusion of time effected the outcome of this score.

However, your story has a nice pace to it. It’s pretty believable, according to how things would happen in real life. The only contradiction to this would be the first encounter between Jihye and Minhyuk. I thought it seemed just a bit too fast, how easily he wasn’t shy with her.  

Characterization 15/15

I have no problem with this aspect of your story. All of the characters have had a reasonable amount of description put into them, and fueling their actions. It took a little while to fully understand Taemin a bit, but his character was fully explained in the twelve chapters, much like all of them.

I particularly enjoyed Minhyuk’s character. I think he is adorable and his character’s innocence is a perfect contrast to Taemin’s arrogance. At first glance, I would have guessed Minhyuk was  the mysterious “Banana Milk”, but I’m guessing by the name, it’s a certain someone else? c;

Ending 0/10

Not over yet

Grammar/Spelling: 7/10

If you hadn’t told me English wasn’t your first language, I never would have guessed. Your grammar is very good.

The only thing you seem to have a problem is with your subject-verb agreement, and past tense verbs. When you specify use a past tense verb in one sentence, you must keep the tense.

Example:

“he interrupts and started heading off”

In this example, you can either say “He interrupted and started heading off.” Or “he interrupts and starts heading off.” The correct one to use in narration would be the first one.  

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5

I am a er for cute stories, and let me tell you, your story was beyond cute. I thought opening a review shop would sort of turn me off to the stories I read, because they would seem to drone on, and be work, but my first story pleasantly surprised me. I found myself trying to guess what was going to happen next, and smile, almost squeal, at the cute moments. I think you just got yourself a new reader, because I really enjoyed your chapters.  

Total: 85/95

89.47%

~DamnThatDubu