illcell
☼ Perfect Dae Request Shop ☼ [Closed] [revamping]PICK-UP STORY LINK REVIEWER: MIRO-CHAN AUTHOR: ILLCELL layout credits
Story Title:
I thought your title was very well thought it. XXIV is VIXX spelt backwards and I found that very interesting and unique; I haven't seen anything like that before. I couldn't really tell it was going to be a romance story though, it seemed more horror, angst and dark. It was an interesting title but I felt like it didn't really fit the genre.
Graphics:
You don't have a poster or a background which is a bummer. I thought a story like this would have some sort of graphic to create more of an atmosphere and would help build more tension and suspense throughout the story. I would suggest to get a poster and a background that creates a dark, angst atmosphere/look so black, white, red, other dark colours, would be a good candicate for that. Description/Foreword:
Characterization:
Honestly, there wasn't too much character description. I didn't really catch much of their personality and mainly your focused on the plot description and the imagery of the scenes and not the character. I think just a chapter dedicated to express their feelings, personality and if they would be likeable or a . Other than that, I think you are progressing well!
Plot:
Your scenery description really enhanced the story plot and bringing to life although you went a little overboard with it. It's perfectly fine
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