KimNurry
☼ Perfect Dae Request Shop ☼ [Closed] [revamping]PICK-UP STORY LINK REVIEWER:deedee_zelo90 AUTHOR: KimNurry layout credits
Story Title:
The title is first thing when a reader searches on a websites. The title attracts the reaers but sometimes it draws them away no matter how much good plot is. The title didn't attracted me, so in the future, choose a better name that would attract the readers in the future. :)
Graphics:
The poster you use for the story attracted me just a bit, I wish if the poster could practically scream for me 'DRAMA'. But it was clearly plain. Im sorry if I seem a bit rude, but I am just trying to be honest.
Description/Foreword:
The description was way too long, you gave out too much information, which I don't like none bit. Try making it short but meaningful for readers to be more interested. With a long description you are ruining a characters you give out too much information.The foreword was well organized, so there's nothing I can say in this section.
Characterization:
I haven't read your previous story you mentioned in your foreword. So its hardest part for me to describe her character. But I can say that Arabella is a strong but later on she became typical girl from every story that she gives in to her father's will to get marry someone that she doesn;t like(arrange marriage-overused). You describe Kris well, his personality.
Plot:
The plot to me has cliches like I alr
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