Carina Irwin / Miss Australia 

Hello! Thank you for being the first to apply to coalesce and thank you for returning! It really means alot that you're giving this story another try! Since you've been in the story before, you know that there wasn't a Miss Australla so I'm pretty excited that there is a new miss country! Carina's 5SOS nickname made me chuckle. It sounds like it could be used for a username lol. I feel kinda silly for picking a picture of Rose with dark hair after ready the appearnce. I will change it later. I like the fact you included atleast one flaw. That just added onto the realism. Also the blue eyes! I like the fact the Carina style is completely different from the face claim's. Thumbs up for that. And thank you so much for list of traits of Carina! It give me a clear idea on how she acts!

Overall I really like Carina but there are two parts that I'm confused about. It seems unrealstic for Carina's aunt and cousin to let her go to Korea on her own especially after they were against the idea. Idk but that part really confused me. Also the english squad part. It'd make sense for her to be friends with Johnny, Mark and Wendy, as they were trainees by the time Carina came to Korea but everyone else seems unlikely. Just explain how they all met and then it should be fine. Please fix those 2 things and then Carina will be accepted!

Thank you for fixing those two things! Carina is now accepted! Great Job!   

 Elodie dupont /  Miss France 

Hello Josi! Thank you so much for returning back to the storry! It means so much to me! Now because you applied with Elodie before, I couldn't help but see how Elodoe 1.0 compared to Elodie 2.0. I could see you've improved a lot since Elodie 1.0. I enjoyed reading the personality part. You went straight to the point of each trait which made it easy to read. Same goes for the background. Thumbs up for that! I like the fact that Elodie picked a company that focused on her interest. I liked what you wrote for the questions section. I could vividly see Elodie being sat down and asked those questions. The second scene request would be fun to write about after reading the love interest ^^ Now this part is optional (im not sure of how strong of a relationship they have) but can you add her family into the realtionship section? I'm not going to penalize you for that.

Overall I really like Elodie 2.0. I didn't find anything that needed to be fixed so Elodie is accepted. Great job!

  Hayley Choi / Miss England  

Hello Quinn! Thank you so much for returning back to the story! It means so much to me! I read through everything up to her fashion style and I like her already! I can already picture her at Tomorrowland and even Coachella :P (the fact that Hayley still has on her Tomorrowland bracelet shocked me lol) I enjoyed reading the background. It was nicely written so thumbs up for you. I was going to ask if Hayley has ever done anything within the arts because it wasn't mentioned in the background ans there was an awkward jump between describing her adventures to auditioning at starship but the trainee life gives me the answer to my question. Jihoon and Hayley are cute. I'm just going to have to come up with a challenge for them if Hayley gets picked lol. 

Overall, I like Hayley! There is just one part that needs my elaboration. Either I overread or some traits weren't explained in the personality. Please fix that one thing and then Hayley will be accepted!  Thank you for fixing what needed to be fixed! Hayley is now accepted! Great Job!

  Edelle Lopez / Miss Philippines  

Hello Kitkat! I just want to apologize for the lateness of this review! I got busy out of nowhere but I am back now. Reading through Edelle's personality (btw love the name) it has a nice flow to it. Very easy to read. I like the fact that Edelle's background was sad but it was no marry sue (if that makes any sense) what I'm basically saying is it was not over dramatic. The first like under the trivia made me so happy! I feel like Daesung is so underrated compared to rest of Big Bang so to see that he's Edelle's bias made me smile lol. For the trainee life it's refreshing to see her race not playing a factor of Edelle not getting along with everyone but instead of it being a competition which is true. And of course I enjoyed the answers that were given to the questions on the app. Like the personality section, the love interest part was well written. The little notes that they would leave for each other had me in awe lol.

Overall, I like Edelle! I didn't come across anything that needed to be fixed or needed more clarification. With that being said, Edelle is accepted! Great Job!

  Bang Gido / Miss Korea  

Hello! Thank you for taking the time to apply! Like I said before I reviewed your app, the title made me laugh! I was not expecting that whatsoever. Tell me how I'm already relating to her and I'm not even past the first part?? That explanation for the Nae-soong nickname is literally me. And of course the Food God (everyone relates to that) Both personality and background sections were written well. They were both easy to follow. I forgot to mention that I like the fact that she was on SMTM4. Like ious apps, I really enjoyed the responses to the questions. Reading through the love interest part, I couldn't help but cringe at the ending. It was cute lol. 

Overall, I think you did a great job with Gido! I didn't come across anything that needed to be fixed. With that being said, Gido is accepted! Great Job! And thank you for the scenes requests

  Huang Zhua / Miss China  

Hello Liam! Thank you for taking the time out to apply! Also so sorry for the lateness with your review!! I'm excited to see a Miss China mainly because there was not one in the first run of this story! For the appearance I like that you described what she wears without using photos for backup. I can just picture what her style is. Same goes for the personality section. I find it helpful when people give examples to personality traits and you did just that. It's nice to hear the mention in Tao within in the app. I feel like no one hardly uses him so this is refreshing. 

Overall, I like Zhua! I have some questions regarding her though. Throughout the app there were name changes? At times Zhua would be referred to as Jane/Janey and Reika? That had me confused. Also can you place the name Wendy either under nicknames of birth name. Before I read the background where you explained that she also goes by that, I was confused as well. In the background can you just state when Zhua started to get into music. It was awkward jump from talking about her as a child to her going to different entertainments. Besides the names and getting into music, I didn't find anything that needed to fixed. Until those are fixed Zhua will be pending. Thank you for fixing what needed to be fixed! Zhua is now accepted! Great Job! 

  Nuala Bree Yang / Miss Ireland  

Hello Jacky! Thank you so much for applying! The first thing that comes to mind when I start reading about Nuala is the amount of nicknames she has (not a bad thing!) It would be fun deciding on which nickname to use in chapters if Nuala gets chosen. Onto the personality, I like the fact that the personality portion is straight to the point. Even though some traits could be explained some more, I'm still able to get a sense of who Nuala really is (btw love the name!) Soooo.....why is her background literally me? O.O It felt like I was reading about myself for second lol. Jumping down to the questions, I really like Nuala's response to the 4th question. I think that's one of the best answers to that question that I've seen so two thumbs up for you. 

Overall, I really like Nuala! I think you did a great job with her! This is something that I'm not going to penalize you over but I do have a question for it. For the talent twins part, are the names in parenthesis just to show if the group was to ever do a song from said group that Nuala would cover said member's part? For example (im going to use your singing twin) Nuala would cover Seungyeon in CLC's Where Are You? Like I said before, you did a great job with Nuala! I didn't find anything that needed to be fixed so, Nuala is accepted! Great Job!

  Lore Van Den Seen / miss belgium  

Hello Sien! Thank you so much for deciding to apply! Before I officially did this review, when the app was first handed in, I took a look at the note that you left and I find it so interesting that students in Belgium learn German along with English and French! Now it makes perfect sense that Lore knows the amount of languages listed. I have to praise you for the way the personality section is written! Personally the way that you written it is my preferred way and it give a better description of the personality of the character. So two thumps up for that! After reading the background, I can honestly say that her and Tristan are cute lol For the questions part, I think Lore is the first person to mention wanting to win first place with the group (there were probably others but I can't remember off the top of my head) so ir's nice to see a different answer. 

Overall I liked reading about Lore! I just have some questions about her. In the relationships section, Kim Yonghyun is listed as her brother, making it the 3rd brother listed but it said in the background she only had 2 older brothers? I was confused about that. Now this may sound very picky of me and this you don't have to change if you don't want (and of course I won't penalize you for this!!) It's about the face claim. I have nothing against Nakajima Mio as a fc but I feel like she looks older (even though she is only 23, imo she looks older) this is something that is totally up to you but can the fc be Jihyo instead? Obviously you don't have to change it but it was just a suggestion^^. Besides the whole brother thing, everything else seems good! Until that is fixed, Lore will be pending! Thank you for fixing everything. Lore is accepted! Great Job!

  Cassie List / Miss USA   

Hello Sun! Thank you so much for applying! So sorry this came out so late! you have no idea how happy I am to see a character with African in her! It's very refreshing to see! I also like the way the personality section is written. Personally, I think listing out the traits and then expanding on them is more on the easy side. So thumbs up for that! Even though Cassie's background was a bit on the mary sue side, I'm fine with it. And as usual, I enjoyed reading over the interview questions. 

Overall I enjoying reading about Cassie! There are just two things that need some clarification/fixing. The first thing that I am going to mention isn't that big of a deal so I won't penalize you for it. Can you list Cassie's aunt in the relationship section please. Next, can you add a bit more to the trainee background? Mainly when she trained in Korea. And finally, can you just list the album that Cassie recorded in the states please? Besides those two things, I didn't find anything else. Please fix those two things and then Cassie will be accepted! Thank you for fixing what needed to be fixed! Cassie is accepted! Great job!

  Ong raejung / Miss Canada  

Hello Nano! Thank you so much for applying! Sorry that this review came out late! The hoilday got in the way! First things first I just want to say thank you for giving Raejung a stage name. Even though it's half of her name, I appericate there is still a stage name so two thumbs up for that! Onto to Raejung's personality, at first read, it was a bit hard to pinpoint which trait was being explained (some more obvious than others) but by the second read through, I understood more. I have to give you an applause for using 15&'s Yerin as the singing twin. Glad to know that they aren't forgetten lol. And ofcourse I enjoyed reading the answers to the interview part. I love the drama that comes along with her love interest! It will be fun to write about tbh. 

Overall, I like Raejung! I didn't find anything that needed to be fixed. With that being said, Raejung is accepted! Great job! 

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