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veryone was afraid of his cold glare, But she didn't, No one ever dare to approach him, But she did, Everyone was scared to even talk to him, But she didn't, No one could make him smile, But she did it Without her realising. 

› Title [ 9/10 ] I think this is a really cute title. I find it especially cute because Kai never smiled, but Na Mi got him to so she's quite literally his happiness. I docked a point off for it being a little ordinary (i.e. I've seen several like it if not the same), but it's still good.

› Foreword and Description [ 7/10 ] While your description and foreword do what I'm looking for, I still felt it was a little lacking. I think that the part where you say "Kai, the famous creep in their school. He never smile, he never laugh, and he never respond to any questions and jokes. Concludes the reason why the whole students called him The Statue." that you should add some more to give the reader a little more of a glimpse into what will happen in the story. Be careful not to give too much away, though!

› Plot [ 17/20 ] Your plot is a little ordinary and overused. Highschool AUs with the cool boy and the quirky, pretty girl are a dime a dozen, and your story wasn't much different from others I've seen. My main critique is that you should add something new to really make your story stand out among the rest. There's nothing wrong with writing clichés, but you really have to convince the reader why yours is better than the many others out there. That said, I think your pace and writing style are very nice. I like how you open with exposition and don't move too fast into the main plot while still introducing main characters and keeping the story moving.

› Characters [ 15/20 ] I hate t