☼ The Final Enchantment
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The Final Enchantment krisyeol_always
story titlefive/five points
The title is very fitting to the story. It gives off a rather mysterious feel and hints at the reader that the story would consist of fantasy elements. I wouldn’t choose another title for your story.
description, foreword & tagsseven/ten points
Your description is really short, just a sentence, but I feel like that is enough for your story, especially with how short the latter is. It gives your readers enough information about your plot, though it doesn’t really tell what the ending of the story would be like. Your foreword is an extract from your story, which I always tend to like reading a lot, since you can get a feel of the writer’s writing style and what not. The words in the Elf (?) language is definitely intriguing, leading the readers into wanting to read more to see what those words mean. However, I don’t really think you should have your author note about the story not having a happy ending since that really spoiled the story for me. Your tags seem okay to me, though I don’t think you need to mark the story as mature.
appearance: graphicsfive/five points, layout/fivefive points
I quite like your poster - the effects are really fitting, but is there a need for two Kyungsoos? Or is there some hidden meaning behind it? The background image matches the poster, giving the story a nice visual theme.
The general display of your work is clean and simple, well done!
characterisationtwelve/fifteen points
Honestly, since your story is so short, there’s not a lot I can comment on, but I can see that both Jongdae and Kyungsoo love each other very much; Jongdae even going as far to spending what little of his remaining life casting a spell over Kyungsoo’s sword. The way Kyungsoo returns Jongdae back to where he came from shows how the former wants to believe in the legend that just maybe Jongdae will come back to life if he’s returned to his origin. The bond between the two is deep and meaningful, despite not being fully displayed in the short chapter. I think you’ve done quite well with your characters considering the length of the story.
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