Wolf-Primal Insticts: Pars 1 & 2

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Wolf - Primal Instincts: Parts 1 & 2 by Southwest

Genre: Drama, Werewolf

Characters:Exo, Luhan, Kai, Kyungsoo, So Hee (oc)

Status: Completed

A new transferee to a school in a new town, who tries to keep his secret hidden.

Notes From Reviewer

Don"t forget to comment when picking up. Also don't forget to credit the shop by directly linking us in your foreward, also feel free to use our banner as well..

Title (7/10)

I think another tiltle will fit more into the story. the title doesnt give a good impression to start readng.

Description & Foreword (18/20)

I think foreword is somehow short, dont you think? however, it kind of matched well with the plot. It made me curious.

Originality (9/10)

It doesnt really resemble the MV, but it made sense.

Storyline: (18/20)

You added many scenes that fit the story, and that made it look good.

Grammar and Spelling (10/10)

I cant find mistakes! OMG! but you can use advanced vocbulary later on.

Characterization (9/10)

You used many characters, and I know it's not easy to develop them all perfectly.

Flow (9/10)

I felt some flow changes. You should add some scenes in part 1.

Personal Enjoyment (9/10)

I usually don't review and wolves fanfictions, and this was my first. In fact, I didnt want to review it in the beginning. But, it was assigned for me, and I am lucky it was; because I really enjoyed it! I think I am going to open up for werewolves hahaha.

Overall (89/100)

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Rover_Orphaned #1 Dec 18, 2015 10:05:47

Chapter 74: Hey,
Thanks for the review. Especially considering it is a long read and not your particular cup of tea. Now that the story is already a few weeks old, I agree with you and a few other reviewers that it dragged on a little too long. But overall, not too shabby for a first attempt. ;) I've credited you in the foreword. ^^
XOXO Mirre

amaeteur #2 Nov 22, 2015 01:32:55

Chapter 76: thank you so much for the review! :) i was a bit nervous when i clicked open the chapter... hahah
and yes i think thats a blending error, i dint notice it at first HAHAh thank you for pointing it out!!

once again, thank you for the review! will come back for more in the future~ :)

FlowerySpeech #3 Nov 21, 2015 14:56:24

Chapter 71: Thank you for the review :D

paulmccartney #4 Nov 15, 2015 09:04:58

Thanks for the review! Picked up :D I don't actually have a shop here, but I have a gallery on a different site, if you'd like me to link..? If not, I can just post it on my profile. I don't know...:/
Once again, thanks! :)

sognatore-xo #5 Nov 10, 2015 15:33:00

I requested a graphic review not sure if it went through though.

amaeteur #6 Nov 7, 2015 02:30:32

hello! requested and upvoted. looking forward to the review! :)

paulmccartney #7 Nov 1, 2015 01:23:38

I've submitted a request! :)

Jinhwanderer #8 Oct 25, 2015 23:00:03

Chapter 70: Hanbin didnt struggle with the workload per se, but with himself and his lost passion. It is a story that would be pretty difficult to understand if you didn't follow ikon/team b in their survival shows and if you didnt experience the struggles that came with it, since it is canon. I do agree with some of your points though. And as for Jinhwan, I know he is a huge mystery but I wanted to leave it that way to have the readers feel the same as Hanbin. He, too, didn't know much about the boy.Btw, what do you mean by sidebar? And thanks for the review. I'll credit you when I get on my PC ^^

tsinaee #9 Oct 23, 2015 09:40:25

Chapter 68: thank you so much! i'll work hard on this, your opinions and response really helped me :) thank you again!