Yellow Balloon

Description

It was chained to a pure white chain and it was being pushed around by the playful wind but still stayed strong in its positive yellow shell. My yellow balloon.

Foreword

             I ran out of the warm light of my house and into the cold darkness of the night. As I ran into the darkness I couldn't see anything but black. I didn’t know where to go or what to do, all I knew was I wanted to get away from them. Then I heard the high pitched screaming behind me. So I quickly turned around and saw her. Her face was blurred from the forested window of the glowing house.

            “Jonghyun please!” She begged “don’t leave me.” Her once beautiful face was now being ruined by black tears that seemed to be carving into her flesh like drops of acid running down wood. 

            “Jonghyun you don’t have to leave.” She started clawing at the glass like a needy child trying to break through to their mother. “You can’t leave me alone with them.”

            I wanted to say how sorry I was for leaving her, I wanted to run up to the window and tell her I will still keep in touch, but when I tried to move I couldn’t. I was so far into the darkness that it started to swallow me up.  I felt like I was being consumed by heavy quicksand pulling me under faster as I struggled to get out. I tried to call out to her but it started to fill my mouth making me choke for air.

 

 

 

 

 

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peggy17688 #1
Chapter 3: hmm. i think i want to read more of the chapters first. cuz the 1st 3 chapters together feel like introduction and not yet deep into the story. hope to see more chapter updates soon. fighting!
shineeshipper #2
Chapter 2: I'm baaaack :D (SHINee's back...SHINee's back.... THIS WEEKEND OMGGGGFGFFGDJSHJSKSNSBSSBJFKS CANT WAIT) hehe idk if I was too quick to judge with the first chapter or you are really quick at improving because there was like no run on sentences or anything like that in this second chap ._.
Good job! XD
But I really like how this fic flows, and how there's already a back story, makes it seem more in depth and gives it a lot more meaning I find :D

Also yay Key is here!! But I feel so bad for Jjong, the poor clown :(
And is Minho Key's cousin ._.?
shineeshipper #3
Chapter 1: This sounds really interesting and fresh ._.
looking forward to the next couple of chapters!
Plus I really really like your description XD.
Also just a teeny little bit of constructive criticism; I noticed some run-on sentences, nothing too major or anything but just remember that a sentence usually has only one major 'idea' :P.
again looking forward to the next update! I really like this clown Jonghyun (assuming it's Jjong XD) never read anything like this before XD.