Clockwork

Description

Saw you on the train

 

Except it wasn't you again

I could not contain

That feeling in my heart again

 

For what it's worth

I still love you

For what it's worth

I still need you

And I just can't let you go

No I just can't let you go

- Maggie Eckford, For What It's Worth

Foreword

 

            Public transportation was always a sort of a sweet escape. There were familiar faces, but no one really cared to get you. No one really minded when it was late at night and you got on only to pull your coat over your eyes and cry some before taking a quick nap. Your phone, which was older than most, buzzed when it was about time to get off, and with a heavy sigh and strayed glances from the people around you, you would get up, off, and trudge home. Nothing spectacular ever happened nor did you meet anyone that made your breath catch in your throat. Nothing made the cold days a little warmer and nothing made the hot days a little more bearable. There was a bleak nothing, and in it, there was comfort.

            Life day after day seemed like clockwork, but in between the ticking there was a small amount of solace that was found when you’d step foot on the subway every morning to work, and as usual, nothing new, no one new, and no one knew. Last night was another sleepless slumber in which eyes kept burning in salted liquid and the pillow was too wet to comfortably sleep on. The light outside the window was too bright and the lump in your throat was too big and the voice in your head was too loud. Everything seemed to come in twos.

            Like how it was two in the morning when the lights (two of them) shone through the window and two little paisley drops fell down two cheeks from two eyes and it hit the bed large enough for two, but there was only one on there, and that was too lonely. The train today though seemed to dawn less than the usual two passengers per stop, and on the one two stops before yours, one person got on and looked over to you. With a quick turn of the head, you looked away, but to no avail, the person came over and sat across from your seat, setting down his bag and offering a warm smile.

            “Good morning.” he said. You looked up from under bangs and studied him, wondering who he was and why he was new to the train. The clockwork had been interrupted.

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SilkyGreen
#1
I found your story by chance on a really bad day, and I just have to say: It made my day. Your fanfic was just amazing! The way the characters were imperfect and flawed and broken made them feel real. The plot, although minimal, was great for depicting the personalities of the protagonists. Also, your writing... Damn, it's just so good! It's actually flawless and well, it really drew me in to the story. All in all, I guess that I want to say that you "have the gift", and to thank you for this amazing piece of writing!
DuckyAlice
#2
Omg. Can i just say that i feel so proud right now. That i have stumbled over this RYstory. I didn't think i'd read this in the beginning and i didn't like stories where they were discontinued. So i was hesitating cause usually authors never update even by social demand. AND I SURE AS HELL DONT REGRET READING THIS STORY ONE BIT.
sehunsmells
#3
Chapter 5: *dead* the development is just so real omfg
go-dokmi
#4
Chapter 6: I just wanted to say that I ran into this story by chance and it was really beautiful. I really don't see prose like this on aff that's so beautiful and meaningful but not overdone. The characters really spoke to me and were perfectly imperfect in a way that felt so real. I was just planning on reading one chapter and going to bed, but you forced me to stay up 3 hours later to read the whole thing. I blame you for my sleep deprivation! Seriously though, this story was amazing and I'm really looking forward to the sequel *^^*
Wonachan
#5
Chapter 5: Beautifully written...
yuuki_kibum #6
Chapter 5: Kawai authornim kawaiii....waiting desperately for the sequel..<3
Kimutan
#7
Chapter 5: YEAH, A SEQUEL. I WAS ABOUT TO CRY WHEN I SAW IT, OH GOD.
geniie123
#8
This is just... AMAZING!!, just amazing!!!
It was beautiful from the beginning to the end. Perfect!, the only thing I don't like is the idea of me not reading this sooner!!
Your an incredible author, and I am really looking forward for the sequel to this truly magnificent story.

Every sentence of every chapter, Had me on my toes, your writing style is so captivating and pure spotless, the way you describe each scene and plot, I couldn't wait until I finished the chapter to go to the next, it was that excellent!!!

I'm sorry, but I just can't get over this story AND your skills in writing, I really envy you, and I hope that one day I could be half as wonderful as you are. ^_^
purplekpop
#9
Chapter 3: I'm crying.
Nope. This is not good. My mom's looking at me and I cannot be crying. I need to compose'
I'm so proud that the Baby fandom has a writer like you
Wow. This scene was amazing. Daehyun crying all night on the bus tears at me and you really know how to write things so beautifully.

I'm sorry if it's the same praise over and over but there's no way for me to express how I feel unless you see me actually crying and hurting. This is so beautiful.

And the metaphor with the wind was so beautiful.
speechless is all ♥
purplekpop
#10
Chapter 2: you hurt my heart with every sentence here and it's so realistic, it's amazing
the way you describe Daehyun physically getting smaller and his eyes losing their luster is incredible and your attention to detail is really fantastic too, chewing like a cow haha

their relationship is amazing and he's the absolute cutest, ugh
adjgadjgha
feels i tell you
;u;

adorable daehyun on christmas >~< it just breaks my heart that he has so much and yet so little
he's like an injured kid here and his past just makes him all the more vulnerable
sigh i just want to gather him up and hold him until he's okay
your detail
dasljghadkjghad i cannot stop the praise >~< so talented

everything';s so sweet when it comes to this boy
gah
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