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 *PrincessHades  | Love and Dreams   

 

 

   Title   

Honestly, we feel that it is a nice title. It complements well with your poster and the title gives off this really romantic vibe.

 

  Foreword/Description  

We think that the long character introduction wasn't needed. This might seems strange but we could actually have a rough idea of how this story will turn out. Lesser description of your character in your foreword would make them more mysterious and would allow readers to want to find out more. 

Instead of putting the character's description, why not put a short glimpse of their past? Interactions between characters could also be a good thing to put inside your foreword and capture your readers' attention.

 

  Plot  

We like how you ended the chapter with a sense of mystery and suspense. It make us want to read more to find out what is going to happen. The plot wasn't what we expected it to be and we had thought that it was going to be another 'Prince Charming' story based on the first few chapters. You proved us wrong and we didn't expect the twist coming. A job well done!

 

    Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation   

For this part, we felt that you have done a great job in it! We did not spot any glaring mistakes, so keep up the good work!

 

  Character Development  

You make your 'y' characters really despicable and that is good because we have never hated such characters so much in a fanfic. However, we really didn't like the cliche characters that you have choosen to use as bullies in this fic. This is because it is something that have been overdone so it gets boring/frustrating after some time.

Luhan's character potrayal was realistic, we could imagine a character like that in real life. We like how he hurts himself just to protect Hyunae, it gives him an extra layer instead of just being the pretty boy who falls in love with the main character eventually.

 

  Ending 

Since you haven't conclude the story yet, we couldn't give you a review here. Do come back again should  you want a review to your conclusion. ^^

 

  Additional Comments 

You actually managed to keep our attention and we are really interested to see how the ending goes. Do continue the story and don't give up!   (✿◠‿◠)

 

 

 

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PrincessHades
#1
Chapter 5: Hey! Thanks for the review! ^^ I seriously think that you guys were too kind! XD
I really appreciate you guys reviewing my story. :) I'll credit you later ^^

P.S About the Luhan character, it was actually based on a real person and his character and I chose Luhan because their characters are almost the same. :) I'll definitely come back when I'm done with this story. :)
evilmagnae91
#2
Chapter 4: I've changed the mistakes you point out, and yeah, and I know, I'm really really really bad at tenses. Thanks again and sorry for my previous reply, I was a little sick, so it does sounds a little stiff right? ^^ Again, I appreciate your review and will try better in next chapters :) <3
Kymori
#3
Title: How to Save a Life

Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/407394/how-to-save-a-life-bigbang-shinee-teentop-groups-gangsterau

Main Characters: Niel (Teen Top) OC

Genre: Angst, Comedy

No. Of Chapters: 8

Status: On-Going

Additional Information: Nope :)

Password: seizetheday
evilmagnae91
#4
Chapter 4: Thanks for your review, I appreciate it, will try to correct it soon since I'm a little busy with real life these days. Thanks again.
LynZy_G
#5
Chapter 3: Thank you for such a constructive review! I was all hyped up inside and shivering before, while and after reading your review. I Definitely learned a lot of pointers! Keep up the good work in helping fellow writers. Fighting! ;D
evilmagnae91
#6
Title: Miss Straight A's VS Mr.(Not So) Perfect
Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/391701/miss-straight-a-s-vs-mr-not-so-perfect-comedy-jinwoon-romance-seohyun-snsd-yonghwa-yongseo
Main Characters: Seohyun, Yonghwa, Jinwoon, Hyoyeon
Genre:Romance, Comedy
Status: Ongoing
Additional Information: Not sure where I should put the password, but just in case, it's seizetheday
foreverdaragon
#7
Chapter 2: Thanks for the review! I make some obvious mistakes (like spelling..for example, the Seungri one), because I don't edit much..Thank you so much for taking time to point out my errors! :) I'll be sure to come back soon.
beautinity
#8
Title: My Co-Workers Are...Animals?!
Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/316179/my-co-workers-are-animals-comedy-fantasy-romance-you-exo-exok-exom
Main Characters: OC, EXO-K, EXO-M
Genre: Comedy, Romance, Fantasy
Status: ongoing
Additional Information: Please be as harsh as you want^^ password: seizetheday
PrincessHades
#9
Title: Love And Dreams
Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/351803
Main characters: OC, Luhan, Kai and somewhat Baekhyun.
Genre: Romance
Status: Ongoing
Additional Information: Just take your time because I don't like to rush people. >< Please tell me the truth. I'm afraid to be hurt but I know I can improve after hearing the truth. I'm looking forward to the review! Hwaiting! ^^ Oh and the password is seizetheday. (You thought I forgotten about it, right? XD)
LynZy_G
#10
Requested. Thanks in advance!... ^^