→ Reviewed by; CloudyDreamer

 

 

→ Title; 4/5

 

The title of the story captivated me immediately but I marked you one down because well, not everyone knows what it means (including me). But still, it's a pull factor of your story because it made me immediately wonder and feel curious...

 

★★★★☆

 

→ Foreward & Description; 5/10

 

I think the description was a little short but in all, it did capture your whole story in a nutshell... Although it does that, I did find it a little boring, maybe you could add more angsty, heart wrenching feeling to it? 

 

★★★★★☆☆☆☆☆

 

→ Display/Appearance; 6/10

 

The poster is really good, fitting in with your angst theme. Showing all the characters like that was a nice touch and even their expressions fit. To help more I think you should change the font to fit with the feel of the story.

 

★★★★★★☆☆☆☆

 

→ Characters; 6/10

 

As for the characters, I like the way you've portrayed them. You haven't come along to all of the other characters just yet, I can't understand that but from what I've already seen I think you will do an even greater job with them. Their emotions and feelings are just...perfect.

 

★★★★★★☆☆☆☆

 

→ Plot/Originality; 13/15

 

Oh Gosh, I haven't read many fics at all that sounded anything alike yours, I really like how you haven't used alternate universe but the characters as they are in reality. I can see where your story is heading and I just love that you've used war as your plot of angst. Though death is a little common with angst, let's hope you have a twist in store.

 

★★★★★★★★★★★★★☆☆

 

→ Grammar/Spelling; 15/15

 

There was no problems at all with your grammar and spelling. ^^

 

★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★

 

→ Writing Style; 10/10

 

You. Write. Beautifully.

 

★★★★★★★★★★ 

 

→ Flow; 8/10

 

Your flow was not too fast and not too slow. It was perfection and if you continue like that...wow.

 

★★★★★★★★☆☆

 

→ Entertainment; 7/10

 

I pouted so hard when I couldn't find the 'Next' button, I really wanted to read more! Every word just... Gah~ 

 

★★★★★★★☆☆☆

 

→ Bonus; 3/5

 

I just wanted to add a few extra points because I really loved your story and there wasn't anything wrong with it really...

 

★★★☆☆

 

→ TOTAL; 78/100 

 

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