→ Reviewed by; CloudyDreamer

 

 

→ Title; 2/5

 

The title of the story is a little cliche and is used a lot, I've seen a few other stories named this.

 

★★☆☆☆

 

→ Foreward & Description; 3/10

 

There was a small description and I don't think it quite had the "hook" to the story so maybe you could update that with more feeling toward the story? The rest of it was used for an author's note and characters so I can't say much more... 

 

★★★☆☆☆☆☆☆☆

 

→ Display/Appearance; 5/10

 

The poster was really cute and quite pretty, it caught my eye so great job there. I don't think the author's note should be so big as you don't really see them in real published books now do you? I'm not saying to not include those completely, just make sure it's plain and small so it doesn't distract from the story. The font is okay and easy to read but maybe you have a little too much going on. Either downsize the writing so you don't have to scroll so much or get rid of it. In my opinion I don't think you should include characters in the foreward because you should just develop their characters throughout the stories.

 

★★★★★☆☆☆☆☆

 

→ Characters; 7/10

 

I quite like how you've portrayed the characters especially the B.A.P members. Your OC's personalities mix well too. Good job on developing the characters as your own.

 

★★★★★★★☆☆☆

 

→ Plot/Originality; 9/15

 

The plot is a little cliche in someways but in all you have adopted it as your own and made it interesting and so forth, well done for this.

 

★★★★★★★★★☆☆☆☆☆☆

 

→ Grammar/Spelling; 15/15

 

There were no spelling or grammar problems from what I read, none that stood out.

 

★★★★★★★★★★★★★★★

 

→ Writing Style; 9/10

 

You're very descriptive but not too detailed that it's boring so that's good. Keep it up!

 

★★★★★★★★★☆

 

 

→ Flow; 8/10

 

Your flow was not too fast and not too slow. 

 

★★★★★★★★☆☆

 

→ Entertainment; 6/10

 

The story was quite good if you're into those things. I enjoyed it.

 

★★★★★★☆☆☆☆

 

→ Bonus; 3/5

 

Just a few extra points because you write so well *^*

 

★★★☆☆

 

→ TOTAL; 67/100 

 

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