→ Reviewed by; sarang_sheshii

→ Title; 3/5

      The title is little catchy i must say. Being a slave to someone is interesting but in my own opinion this word is very usual, i read so many fics. regarding slave who were the story is about sellling there child to pay debt or having an arrang marriage. But still i'll gave you this.

 ★★★☆☆

→ Foreward & Description; 7/10

       Your Description was quite simple and can be easyly to understand for the readers. For the Forwrd you put the characters detalization which is quite good. But the only problem to be is you used too little info. for the character but i understand what you really wanna do. You want the readers themselves to find out how each charatcter behave you just put some clues like that. 

★★★★★★★☆☆ 

→ Dispaly/Appearance; 7/10

        The poster and the background was great. Its simple and kind of boring but i like how it pleased and attracts my eyes. The only problem here is your Font and text arrangement. It's not pleasing but more on irritatebly because of the color combination and the little oversized text size but i like how some colors compliment the poster and bg. Ang i have a question whats with the trailer thingy?? if you would put something like that is for me not pleasable . I'm thinking the better that you put in the trailer is some of the lines  on the story that can get the readers attention.  

★★★★★★★☆☆

→ Characters; 7/10

         EXO M. You decided to write something about EXO and it's really popular right now after debut so its a good thing but also theres a bad thing about writing a fic. to popular ones its the competetion that can happen every theres so many stories updated and readers can't decide what they'll read but i am not saying to never write an EXO fic. i'm just stating my observations. So on the characters You based there attitudes via their appearance which is usual cause we don't really know whats our idols attitude in real. And the ulzzang you used is also good i think she both complemeted Kris and Lu Han. 

★★★★★★★☆☆

→ Plot/Originality; 10/15

          Your fic. was funny i can say and it's giving me chills. HAHAHAHA. which was a good way. But the plot is really common in the world of stories that you'll be arranged marriage and you don't like it cause you love someone else then you'll be kidnap they the two of you fall then wolla. It's really nothing new to me aside from the cute moments that can still make your readers smile and want to read more. 

★★★★★★★★★★☆☆☆☆☆

→ Grammar/Spelling; 14/15

          I had no problems with it, I like how you know your words well and that mades me happy . I think both of you are great in terms of spelling and your grammar . 

★★★★★★★★★★★★★★☆

→ Writing Style; 6/10

          I like your writing style its very detailed compare to the description. Every chapter is long and full of suspense. While reading your fic. i had mixed emotions and i don't know  why. The only problem i am seeing is the point of view it's kinda awkward in a way. Usually when you are reading you can imagine it but this It's like when you are reading you imagined that the characters moved only when you think and it's nnot automically. But in all you two had good styles. ★★★★★★☆☆☆☆ 

→ Flow; 6/10

           I was expecting that things that they would that they are getting married in instant can instantly happened . The good way to flow your story more is having them do different interactions that maybe can fall to each other more or hate themselves that can catch a reader. I'll just advice that take evertything slowly and surely. 

★★★★★★☆☆☆☆

→ Enteratainment; 6/10

          I was entertained at some parts but get bored also in others. When you are writing make sure that there will be no dull moments because it can reduce a readers interest and might unsubscribe if dull moments continues. 

★★★★★★☆☆☆☆

→ Bonus; 3/5

           Just wanna add you a 3 points since your my first costumer here in Memme Grande. But the main reason i gave you this is the satisfaction that i got when i read your story plus your writing styles can be great it just did some polishing and alot of reviewing. 

★★★☆☆

→ TOTAL; 69/100 

sheshii notes ; Well i hope i didn't hurt anything in my comments i just said everthing based on my taste and what i think. So feel free to ask me to review more of your stories.