my perfect life with U-KISS !!!!!!

Description

your parent deside you are mature now that your 18 you can live on you own but when that happend you were living with u-kiss they found out you can dance and sing and do lots of cool things .laugh

Foreword

NOPE NO FORWORD IM NOT WASTING MY TIME ON WITH THE STORY and sorry for no picture

Dont you see awesomeness poster made by Chocoduck ;D
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EXOEXOEXO88 #1
UKISS XD !!
yurifan14 #2
lol i dont understand this its like all over the place but i love my u-kiss
Chippy #3
CUTTEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!<br />
Update soon! <3
neverland #4
haha! the pillow fight? haha! NICE
asianrocker721 #5
thank you!!!
neverland #6
U Kiss fanfic eh? Cool!!!
asianrocker721 #7
hwaiting to you too!!!!!!
ShadowYin #8
A very short and sweet fanfic ^___^<br />
Hwaiting~
PrinceAeu #9
LOL. I love how Kiseop acts before he thinks! He didn't even realize that the cookies would be steaming hot, since he wanted to eat them so much. XD U-Kiss's such a cute, amusing group here! Mary's an easy going kind of girl - I really like her~ Ahahaha, she and Kevin will be the ones who get along with the more childish ones! :D Kevin will take the legs, Mary will take the arms, and they will drag him out of the house to the park! I love how your chapters show so much with so little. <3 It's a good thing to be able to write like that! <br />
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I don't have much to say for critique, especially since the writing format has noticably gotten easier to understand and read! :D Plus, there are the quotation marks, too, that indicates when a new person is speaking. Awesome! The most I can say is to use punctuation other than exclamation points and question marks, such as periods, colons, semicolons, and commas! Try to capitalize the first letter of the first word of a new sentence, too. Other than that, great! :D I'll be awaiting the next chapter rather eagerly~ <3 HWAITING!<br />
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- Ae
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