PILLOWFIGHT! PT. I

my perfect life with U-KISS !!!!!!

A/N: I warn you now... I find my writing style to be quite different from the original author, Asianrocker's, so uh. Yeah. - PrinceAeu

 

 

Mary grinned devilishily, sneaking up behind Dongho and whammed a pillow into his head.

"Ouch!" He shouted, glaring at her and pouting. He grabbed one of the pillows and threw it at her.

Fortunately, she dodged.

Unfortunately, it hit Alexander smack dab in the face.

"You...!" He growled, jumping off the bed he had been sitting on.

He flung one of the longer pillows at Kevin, who had nothing to do with it.

Until now, anyway.

Kevin snatched up a random pillow and slapped somebody with it.

Kibum's face after the pillow detached itself from it was priceless.

He scrambled to his feet and collected all of the pilllows from the floor.

Mary burst out laughing, her sweet, melodious voice echoing throughout the room. She playfully took one of the pillows away from Kibum and jabbed Dongho in the face with it.

Kiseop, who had been taking a bath in the shower, walked into the room only to have a pillow meet his face.

Everyone froze.

Uh-oh.

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EXOEXOEXO88 #1
UKISS XD !!
yurifan14
#2
lol i dont understand this its like all over the place but i love my u-kiss
Chippy #3
CUTTEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!<br />
Update soon! <3
neverland
#4
haha! the pillow fight? haha! NICE
asianrocker721
#5
thank you!!!
neverland
#6
U Kiss fanfic eh? Cool!!!
asianrocker721
#7
hwaiting to you too!!!!!!
ShadowYin
#8
A very short and sweet fanfic ^___^<br />
Hwaiting~
PrinceAeu
#9
LOL. I love how Kiseop acts before he thinks! He didn't even realize that the cookies would be steaming hot, since he wanted to eat them so much. XD U-Kiss's such a cute, amusing group here! Mary's an easy going kind of girl - I really like her~ Ahahaha, she and Kevin will be the ones who get along with the more childish ones! :D Kevin will take the legs, Mary will take the arms, and they will drag him out of the house to the park! I love how your chapters show so much with so little. <3 It's a good thing to be able to write like that! <br />
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I don't have much to say for critique, especially since the writing format has noticably gotten easier to understand and read! :D Plus, there are the quotation marks, too, that indicates when a new person is speaking. Awesome! The most I can say is to use punctuation other than exclamation points and question marks, such as periods, colons, semicolons, and commas! Try to capitalize the first letter of the first word of a new sentence, too. Other than that, great! :D I'll be awaiting the next chapter rather eagerly~ <3 HWAITING!<br />
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- Ae