what why me!!!!

my perfect life with U-KISS !!!!!!

*nobody pov*

you wake and put this on http://www.polyvore.com/cgi/set?id=28505974 then you went downstair and you say hello momma daddy and oppa mom + dad + oppa : hello mary come sit we have to tell you something. ok say mary  dad : we're letting you living on your own your grown up mary : ok * went packing* bye bye mary says bye  the family they gave her hugs and kisses and the address ( to boring )

skipping to the fun part

you make were making some cookies but when somebody was kocking on the door you open it was u-kiss

they came in and say welcome and you say thanks im making some fresh cookies you guys  want some then ki seop say YES !!!!!!!

well than you got to wait you say in his face kiseop pouts

   httthhh i sai skg

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EXOEXOEXO88 #1
UKISS XD !!
yurifan14
#2
lol i dont understand this its like all over the place but i love my u-kiss
Chippy #3
CUTTEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!<br />
Update soon! <3
neverland
#4
haha! the pillow fight? haha! NICE
asianrocker721
#5
thank you!!!
neverland
#6
U Kiss fanfic eh? Cool!!!
asianrocker721
#7
hwaiting to you too!!!!!!
ShadowYin
#8
A very short and sweet fanfic ^___^<br />
Hwaiting~
PrinceAeu
#9
LOL. I love how Kiseop acts before he thinks! He didn't even realize that the cookies would be steaming hot, since he wanted to eat them so much. XD U-Kiss's such a cute, amusing group here! Mary's an easy going kind of girl - I really like her~ Ahahaha, she and Kevin will be the ones who get along with the more childish ones! :D Kevin will take the legs, Mary will take the arms, and they will drag him out of the house to the park! I love how your chapters show so much with so little. <3 It's a good thing to be able to write like that! <br />
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I don't have much to say for critique, especially since the writing format has noticably gotten easier to understand and read! :D Plus, there are the quotation marks, too, that indicates when a new person is speaking. Awesome! The most I can say is to use punctuation other than exclamation points and question marks, such as periods, colons, semicolons, and commas! Try to capitalize the first letter of the first word of a new sentence, too. Other than that, great! :D I'll be awaiting the next chapter rather eagerly~ <3 HWAITING!<br />
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- Ae