Our not so nice meeting...

Our fate..
Soo pov—About three days later, Kyuhyun wakes up from his unconsciousness. "Anneyoung, you have finally waken up. My name is Choi Soo young, your best friend Choi Siwon's sister and I am your nurse." "Just get out of my room I want to be alone!" he yelled at me harshly. Choi Soo young, take a deep breath. You cannot outburst since you are his nurse. "I do not know what happened between you and Seohyun and I know you are hurt and wants to be ALONE but it was my brother—yours best friend's request so I can't. Sorry for that!"I replied to him very calmly. "How the world do you know Seohyun?!"he yelled AGAIN. "You were muttering about her and kept saying her name for millions of times and don't you know how to speak more politely?! You kept yelling at me!! Nurses also have temper you know!" and I stomped off to find my brother. "That girl is different from other girls. She doesn't flirt with me while we were talking, she talked as if we were long lost friends..Hyung ah, why didn't you tell me that you have such a cute sister but no one is cuter than Seo hyun my love..." he mumbled under his breath but was loud enough for me to hear it from the outside. Suddenly, I felt a sense of jealousy inside me...when I reached my brother's office and I complained non-stop. "Oppa, I cannot be HIS nurse anymore! He is rude, ill-mannered so I repeat myself, I CANNOT be his nurse!". Siwon looks at me and smiled ,"you know that he is broken hearted and he needs someone to bring his own self back…and i think only you can do it so please…you…know how he felt since you and…Key broke up…right?" Siwon looks at. Tears started clouding and the world becomes blur..."I still love him oppa…me and Kyuhyun is the same…both the ones that we love, they all left us…Okay, I will try again,however, if he really really made me angry, I CANNOT be his nurse anymore!" and with that I left and did not heard what oppa was saying. "i always wanted to be with Kyuhyun and not Key... You really have forgetten your childhood friend eh?"
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byunkeyk
#1
Chapter 10: Please update soon.
Va_asianloverz
#2
Chapter 10: please update soon
chosandy1
#3
Chapter 10: idiot kyuhyun, he just broke sooyoung heart. keep updating
haeraa
#4
@21diadems: yep, English is not my mother tongue. For spelling mistakes, sorry! Don't worry, you are not naggy! I know someone who is more naggy than you—my mother. (The word 'naggy' does not exist in dictionary) thanks for the compliment!! Anyway, since I updated, yours turn to update!!!
HelloPinkPlanet
#5
Chapter 10: yay! finally an update! X3
I think your writing got a lot better now, as you try to explain the situation a little more than you used to do.
But what I just noticed is...you have quite a few spelling mistakes and sometimes you're jumping between the tenses...It's probably because of English not being your mother tongue(?), but maybe you should let someone proofread your chapters?
I know that I'm making lots of spelling mistakes too and sometimes I overlook many of them by accident, so I might also look for a proofreader, but I think it would help the reader so that he doesn't get distracted so often while reading
*sighs*
I'm always just nagging...I'm sorry...
haeraa
#6
@21diadems: don't worry, your comment doesn't sound negative to me and I really happy that someone had pointed out my weak areas where I could improve on.. :D
@Chocolate_loves: there will be tons of kyuyoung moments but you just have to wait for this stupid author to update LOLzzz...
And lastly, I am sorry to say this I won't be able to update until October 3rd because of my exams and wish me good luck because in Singapore it is really important for us the primary schooler. Thx a lot and really for all my fellow readers! :D Mianhae but please support me and please try to understand mt bad English and bad writing. After all I am just a teenager. Thanks alot once again!! Oh holy ____! I had blurted out so much things!! So sorry!!! >.<|||
Chocolate_loves #7
Kyuyoung moments plz
Also longer chs plz
Update soon
HelloPinkPlanet
#8
nuuuuuu! >.< don't say this. I think your story is quite charming...and also...my stories are far away of being perfect...but as time goes by your writing style will improve, so don't think that your story isn't nice or the story of someone else is way better^^

and about this chapter...well...it's really short...but ok...mmmh...but it's a little...choppy? I don't know if you know what I mean but I think you should try writing out more so that the sentenced are more linked to each other...
Right now your story is more like a listing of the things that happen. Just try out linking them^^

mmmh...I'm really sorry if it sounds that negative, but I think this will help you improving your writing style. Cause after all the plot of the story is really good *thumbs up*
shanaa12
#9
ooh, short chappie -,-
haeraa
#10
Thx 21diadems but I think yours story are much more nicer! Mine is0.000000000000009%nice but yours 100% nice! —.— (V)