Title: Haru Haru: A Tragic Love Story.

Review Request From: angelfocusbroken.

Storylink: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/68525#comments

Title: Haru Haru: A Tragic Love Story.~~~ By: angelfocusbroken.

REVIEW: 5, 4, 3, 2, 1, START, LETS GO~!!!!!!

Title Grab: [ 9/10 ]

Your title gives away the story but at the same times makes the curious. But its a good title ^^.

Foreword/Description: [9/10]

SPACING SPACING SPACING

It makes it easier for the reader to read. I love the adorable pics, and great job with description and foreword. ^^

Storyline/Flow: [25/30]

SPACING AGAIN... But other than that everything else is well, grammar and spelling mistakes here and there other than that everything else is all good ^^.

Character Portayal: [25/30]

How you portray your characters are a-okay ^^ good job ^^

Extras/Laughs/Bonuses: [10/20]

Lacking... yet you have the minumum ^^.

Overall: [78/100]

A C+ GOOD JOB ^^ <3 Thank YOUU FOR LETTING ME REVIEW YOUR STORY
SORRY ITS SO SHORT =3 ITS HARD TO JUDGE WHEN YOURSTORY HARDLY HAS ANY MISTAKES. BUT KEEP WRITING AND FIGHTING =P. DONT TAKE IT HARSLY WHEN I GAVE YOU A LOW SCORE IN ENTERATINMENT =3 SOWRRYY <3 THANK YOUUUUUUUU AGAIN

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CrazyFujoshi #1 Aug 15, 2014 06:21:54

Oh It Seems That Your Reviewings On Hold. But Of You Spared The Time When You Get Back Could You Review My First Fanfic. Its A Kaisoo Oneshot. Thanks http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/806817 :)

KlMJONGIN #2 Aug 20, 2012 16:16:35

Is this shop still open? o.e

xxinverted #3 Apr 14, 2012 22:22:24

I know you're on hold, but when you're not, please take a look at this ^^ I haven't gotten a lot of reviews because it's my first fic and I just started on it, but I'd like to have someone as worthy as you to take a look at it and critique it, please :D

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/171685/blinded-but-by-what-2ne1-dara-jonghyun-key-shinee-you-2shinee1

missterious #4 Apr 7, 2012 16:04:26

up and running with the update :) could you add my story link here, i think you forgot it? lol.

missterious #5 Apr 7, 2012 15:09:44

hey there, it looks like you lost some of your review chapters wen AFF crashed. i actually had your chapter 7 because i copy-pasted it into my fic as a chapter, and was able to retrieve it from my cache :)

here is your credit, and feel free to repost in your shop. right now my hotlink to your original review won't work, but if you add back a 7th chapter, it will :)

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/79224/6

ilikekpop #6 Mar 17, 2012 11:42:53

I will ask u to review once i get my poster ^^
So i subscribed already lol

ilikekpop #7 Mar 17, 2012 11:40:59

I want to ask u oppa, but i'm afraid lol
U hate my grammar XD
and i'm waiting for a poster ^^
Excited lol

lovekpop55 #8 Mar 4, 2012 23:42:42

Review my story He's Perfect please! http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/147999/he-s-perfect-kikwang-romance-you

LadyComma #9 Mar 4, 2012 20:49:56

Thanks for my review! ^^

LadyComma #10 Mar 4, 2012 18:42:07

DP means display picture lol, don't feel bad, it took me a while to figure out its meaning too >.< By the way, I subscribed to your story because I think it's going to be AWESOME and plus you have some amazing photos of my biases on there lol ^0^